Technomancy, I am in dire need of a critique. Options

[Aristotle9]

Everywhere else I go, no one reviews my work and I want to improve. I'd provide a link to my story, but my forum was moved the last time I did that.

Technomancy

2042, the Era of Technomancy. People had begun to rely on magic and technology alike. Cars still use wheels but no longer use gas. At the brink of total disarray during the Oil Crisis, a renewable energy source called Omega had appeared from the Earth’s core. Life had jump started and technology began to advance. What couldn’t be foreseen, however, was that Omega had mutated the people in a non-physical way. Power that was once dormant, was now awakened. On the other hand, not everyone had this power. At first, people began to conflict. Races were no longer black, white, Asian, etc. Now, it was Human vs. Omegai. In the midst of a battle, a deity named Seilon appeared and put a stop to the fights once and for all. How this was done, is unsure. Even to the governments. Since humans didn’t have problems with Omegai anymore, Seilon decided to add more species to Earth. Elves and other creatures that were once myth, were now a reality.
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The moon was a white orb in the sky and her red stained hands were wiped away in the snow. Miyuki Takai brushed her violet hair away from her Neptune-blue eyes to glance out the train window. An hour later, a silver metropolis glowed from afar. Shiruba-Keishi, the city she called home.
As the train pulled sat the station, an hour later, she walked along the platform on her way to the exit. A cat-woman with short blonde hair and red lips handed Miyuki an envelope before vanishing in the crowd. Once her mission was complete, Miyuki made her walk home.
Her dark apartment was lit by nothing but the moon. Miyuki went into her room, changed and finally took a look at the envelope. The orange sachet was adorned with an image of a crown and once she dug into the it, she pulled out a small silver star fell into her pale hand. Miyuki examined the star adoringly before embedding it in her collar.

“Only three more vacancies to go” Miyuki muttered with a smile.

With joy, Miyuki went to bed.
~**~ Partnership ~**~
Miyuki awoke and got ready. Her hair was short (like Violet Baudelaire) and she had two earrings in her left ear while having a crown-shaped earring in the right. She an indigo, off-shoulder dress with a corset that was long on one side, black combat boots with black stockings, and a black lace collar. She exited her building and strolled through the city.

[Three more kills and I’m a free bird] Miyuki thought, [Wonder if there’re any more jobs]

Miyuki entered a glass skyscraper and went into the elevator. With a card, she swiped it along the bottom of the button panel. The panel slid up and a computer appeared. Miyuki typed in the code and access was granted. The elevator went from A1 to B5, and once Miyuki exited the elevator, she was greeted by a computer.

“Welcome to CROWN, Miyuki Takai” the computer said.

CROWN. Meaning Control Rampant Omegai With Nanotechnology. Miyuki wasn’t out of control, she just didn’t have anywhere else to go. CROWN treated her well, but she preferred a lifestyle where she wasn’t just a killing machine. On the other hand, she had done her jobs with such expertise, she was one of the top hundred killing machines.
Miyuki entered an office where the woman with cat ears sat at a desk.

“Miyuki” the woman greeted.

“Save it Aedya, I need another mission” Miyuki said as she sat on a chair.

“You truly want freedom don’t you? We give you everything here” Aedya said.

“Yes, you’ve provided a home for me, which I paid for. That way, when I’m free, you can’t take my home from me. You’ve paid me, fed me, and even took care of me medically. However, I’m tired of being in debit to you.” Miyuki blurted.

“It’s just that...you do such a good job here” Aedya argued.
“Relax. I’m still working here.” Miyuki said.

Aedya smiled and pulled a folder from her desk.
“This task will give you another point” Aedya said.

Miyuki took the folder and went through it’s contents. She looked up at Aedya’s smiling face before putting the folder back on the table.

“You want me to bring another Omegai here to control?” Miyuki inquired.

“Not exactly. This Omegai is has been in captivity from a young age and needs to be saved. Thus, less stars need to be earned. You know, as compensation” Aedya said.

“Fine” Miyuki said.

Taking the folder, Miyuki exited CROWN Headquarters.
~**~ Save ~**~
Curled up in a dark corner, Vergil Augustine prayed for death. He had been in captivity since he was 16 and knew life wouldn’t improve. Captured from the streets during his life as a runaway, Vergil was put under many tests. If he had only been human, he would’ve been let go. Whenever, Vergil pondered: Which is better? Stay home or stay in the labs? He tried to think of a third option.
A ceiling tile was removed and Miyuki dropped from the air vents. With a small laser, she worked at the cell bars. Looking into the cell, she saw nothing but wine-coloured eyes staring at her.

“It’s no use. The cell is heat resistant” a voice said, hopelessly.

“Before I continue: You are Vergil Augustine, right?” Miyuki inquired.

“...Yes” Vergil replied.

Miyuki nodded and took a step back. With a wave of her hand, a ring of light accompanied by swords cut through the bars. Both disbelief and relief surged through Vergil’s body as he rushed towards his ticket to freedom. Miyuki stared at Vergil with confusion. He was thin and was covered in dirt and blood.

“Let’s go” Miyuki said.

“We can’t. Not without the others” Vergil said.

“I only came here for you” Miyuki said.

“Please” Vergil pleaded.

Miyuki had to admit, she couldn’t leave these poor souls to die. One by one, other Omegai were freed and they all stood behind the building they were captive in. Miyuki pulled out her phone.

“Aedya, I’ll need...two vans.” Miyuki said.

Half an hour later, two black vans arrived. Miyuki took Vergil in her car while the others entered the vans.

“Where are they going?” Vergil asked.

“Where you’re going” Miyuki replied.
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Miyuki was called in the next morning and when she arrived in Aedya’s office, Vergil was with her. Vergil looked different. He was still somewhat thin, since he had some eating to do but other than that, he looked like a pinnacle of health. His long silver hair was now in a short and effortless hairstyle. He wore a black cropped jacket with a hood, a dark red tank top, black pants, black shoes, gloves, and a sapphire pendent that hung on a silver chain.

“Come on!” Miyuki blurted.

“Good, you know then” Aedya said with a smile.

“Why?” Miyuki asked.

“He only needs 2 stars and so do you” Aedya said as she handed Miyuki her third star.

Miyuki took the star and embedded it into her bracelet. She couldn’t help but feel envious of Vergil’s bracelet. She had to accumulated 8 stars while he only had to collect 2. It was annoying, but at least times with Vergil would be quick.

“I assume I have no choice” Miyuki said, Aedya nodded.

“Aedya, where am I supposed to stay?” Vergil asked. Miyuki wished it wasn’t her home.

“We’ve gotten you a small apartment, but it’s not ready so you’ll be staying with Miyuki for a week” Aedya said as she handed Vergil a folder, “Take note that if you work here long enough, we’ll upgrade your abode”

“Thank you” Vergil said before walked out.

Miyuki glared at Aedya’s smiling face. Aedya held out her hand and Miyuki promptly handed back the file she was given before. As Miyuki walked out towards her car, where Vergil awaited, dread hovered above her.

“Did Aedya tell you about the folders?” Miyuki asked.

“No” Vergil entered the car.

“Always return your folder to your Supervisor. CROWN likes to recycle” Miyuki replied.

By nightfall, the duo had arrived at Miyuki’s apartment. Dark, but often mistaken for spooky, could be used to describe the home. Black, dark purples and blue, silver and bits of white engulfed the modern furniture that adorned the house. Once dinner was made and eaten, Miyuki and Vergil went to their respected rooms.