who are you?, resently written |
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 Jun 9 2004, 04:51 PM
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 speak without words  Group: Member Posts: 395 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 15,622  |
Who are you?
In this mirror you see someone you've seen too often. Always slightly different and older. This time, they have tears streaming down their face. You know this person, their every move and thought. Does everyone know this person too? They only tell themselves they do. You know in your heart and soul that they have no idea. Who they see is who they believe. So easily deceived, they think it's you. So perfect and joyful. It's the total opposite. They can't read your thoughts, they haven't lived your life. They don't know who you are. ---it's kind of missing a closing..i couldn't think of anything. |
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Jun 9 2004, 06:58 PM
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 advanced newbie... S2 Group: Member Posts: 3,504 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 752 |
verynice, but in the begining, it confused me when you said "they" on third line.
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Jun 9 2004, 09:13 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 3,077 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,904 |
 That was great. I feel like that all the time. I'm living a lie...
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Jun 11 2004, 12:41 AM
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 Look its... Group: Official Member Posts: 5,817 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 4,767 |
damn this poem is good. seems real to me and sort of reflects what i feel
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Jun 11 2004, 12:59 PM
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 kristin Group: Member Posts: 5,705 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,985 |
i like it
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