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 Feb 21 2007, 07:41 PM
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"The Wages of Sin is Death"
The penitent priest doth spiel. Blinding virtue directing fear To those who seek redemption. The echo of a choir can still be heard Resonant sounds bounce off stone statues. The watchful believer eyes skeptics in the crowd His faith disallowing his own violent urges. I look around and see these things. The baby who cries from inherited sin. I look around and hear their silence. Attentions focused on their divine speaker. The quiet is broken by a ringing phone. The man tries in earnest to restrain it's sound. I look around and feel their eyes Condemning him in this house of God. The priest speaks wisdom through monotony Children snore, their parents scold. The basket, like a beggar, feeds off guilty souls. Everyone must earn a living. The sermon is slowly coming to a close. Anxious members gather items in a hurry. The priest's final words strike nerves of the devoted His motives known only to the one above. I leave this house with a heavy heart My thoughts on what the priest had said: "Imminent destruction and painful resolution." My path to forgiveness is still unclear. |
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| *Uronacid* |
Feb 21 2007, 07:45 PM
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That's absolutely breathe takeing... dude, you have captured church in the eyes of an "unbeliever" perfectly. This is amazing. I totally agree with you. To someone who is entering into a church setting, I could understand why it would look this way.
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Feb 22 2007, 01:22 AM
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 Jake - The Unholy Trinity / Premiscuous Poeteer. Group: Member Posts: 1,272 Joined: May 2006 Member No: 411,316 |
Like, Oh my God. Wow, Jeremy. Priceless piece of literature.
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Feb 22 2007, 02:11 PM
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heavy completely heavy
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| *StanleyThePanda* |
Feb 22 2007, 02:31 PM
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QUOTE(Uronacid @ Feb 21 2007, 7:45 PM)  you have captured church in the eyes of an "unbeliever" perfectly. Definitely agree. Even though I am a "believer", I know how it is. This was written very well, Jeremy.  & I love your sig, btw. <3 |
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Feb 27 2007, 08:15 PM
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i like how creative it is and the words you used. correct me if im wrong, but when you say "Resonant sounds bounce of stone statues" is it supposed to be off? like the sounds bounce off the statues? I really like this poem
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