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post Feb 14 2007, 12:27 AM
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so i was talking to a friend & she asked about how my story was going..to be truthful, i was stuck on it (finishing my work is impossible for me) but then i had this idea. & i talked to her about it. she thought it was a pretty good idea. basically, i'm going to write about a girl who went into a coma. & while she's in it, she 'dreams' about never being in one at all, everything in her life is all the same, but there's someone who she'd fallen madly in love with. 2 years later though she finally wakes up & realizes he was never real.




hah. anyone tell me something they'd like to read about, like, what kind of stories get your attention?
 
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post Feb 14 2007, 12:47 AM
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QUOTE(janejumped @ Feb 14 2007, 1:27 AM) *
so i was talking to a friend & she asked about how my story was going..to be truthful, i was stuck on it (finishing my work is impossible for me) but then i had this idea. & i talked to her about it. she thought it was a pretty good idea. basically, i'm going to write about a girl who went into a coma. & while she's in it, she 'dreams' about never being in one at all, everything in her life is all the same, but there's someone who she'd fallen madly in love with. 2 years later though she finally wakes up & realizes he was never real.
hah. anyone tell me something they'd like to read about, like, what kind of stories get your attention?

Make a descriptive satire with different characters that never actually meet but by their seperate actions all directly affect the other's actions.
 
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post Feb 14 2007, 05:26 AM
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QUOTE(The Abominable C-Pillar @ Feb 14 2007, 12:47 AM) *
Make a descriptive satire with different characters that never actually meet but by their seperate actions all directly affect the other's actions.


Dude, just because you have an English class now, that you regularly show up for, don't pretend like you know what Literature terminology is. Pfft. Hhaa.

But, that's a really interesting idea. It reminds me of that movie with Keanu Reeves. The one with the house. THE LAKE HOUSE! That's it. Haha. Shhh. I can't hear Keanu.
 
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post Feb 14 2007, 11:20 AM
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QUOTE(JakeKKing @ Feb 14 2007, 6:26 AM) *
Dude, just because you have an English class now, that you regularly show up for, don't pretend like you know what Literature terminology is. Pfft. Hhaa.

But, that's a really interesting idea. It reminds me of that movie with Keanu Reeves. The one with the house. THE LAKE HOUSE! That's it. Haha. Shhh. I can't hear Keanu.

haha. Its a damn poetry class dude. We learn absolutely nothing about terminology.
 
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post Feb 14 2007, 12:46 PM
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How are you going to solve the conflict of her not having her love in real life? It seams that if you just end it there it would be a bad ending. And are you going to put in the emotions of her friends and family in real life? I think that would be interesting.


Over all I think it would be a good story. You should tell me when it's done.

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post Feb 14 2007, 07:58 PM
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^ i haven't thought through it completely. actually, i planned on laying the story out in a hospital, where's she's already woken up. then through her journal you read about the world her mind created for her when she went into a coma. i don't even know how she got into one in the first place yet. but that's how it'll be..& in the end, i plan on making it one of those dream scenes where she reunites with her love. like rose in titanic
 
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post Feb 16 2007, 04:13 PM
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That sounds almost exactly like "Comfort & Joy." It's a novel about this woman who gets in a plane accident and ends up walking away from the wreckage, finding a small town, and falling in love with the owner of the Inn she was staying at. As it turns out, she was actually in a coma and she never met him.

Then she finds out that during her coma, she was the "imaginary" friend of the innkeeper's son. She goes to search for the boy and his father, and then they end up together.

Anyway, I still think that you could have a good story if you add something a little different to the plot, while still keeping the basic concept of the coma/dream in it.
 
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post Feb 18 2007, 01:00 PM
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wow. seriously? -_-i had no idea..well i guess me & that author think alike? haha
 
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post Feb 18 2007, 01:28 PM
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Have you considered only revealing to the reader that she's trapped in a coma later on in the story? It would probably make for a good twist and/or could significantly heighten your delivery.
Maybe a bit predictable or cliché, but I'd definitely favor it over recounting the events through her diary.
Also, ending it tragically wouldn't be so bad...some might really get a kick out of it. laugh.gif
 
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post Feb 18 2007, 07:46 PM
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^Actually, his idea's not bad.

Yeah, you and the author do think alike. But I still think that you've got the makings of a great story.
 
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post Feb 19 2007, 06:58 PM
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I think your idea sounds a bit cliche, Just the whole part when love has to come in to the story and such and shes in this great tragedy. It just seems really common. I think its sounds like a good idea, but it matters how you choose to write about it. I think it would be neat if the guy she was dreaming about really did exist he just wasn't how he looked in her dream and he was in the most unsuspecting person you could imagine. -shrugs- I don't know. I think I would have to read the first part when ever you decide to write it.

The whole coma thing, makes me think of this lifetime movie I had to watch in a doctors office once. pinch.gif I don't know what it was called though.
 

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