Poem, my ex & 1stlove. |
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 Apr 14 2006, 08:21 AM
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Passing by YMCA
please be there, I pray all these fears have caused my tears remember the first day we talked? and all the places we walked? I loved your hand around my waist how did you end up so two faced? the mornings you messaged me just to say ”hey babe, have a good day =) “ my first love, yeah that’s you I always hoped that you’d stay true first I noticed “he’s so hot” I’d kill anyone who said “no, he’s not!” what you think ? :S |
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Apr 14 2006, 09:23 AM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
QUOTE first I noticed “he’s so hot” I’d kill anyone who said “no, he’s not!” Ahah. That's so cute! But .. if he's your ex why do you think so highly of him? Instead of elaborating on why he was good, you should elaborate on why you broke up with him. It would make your poem more clear and tie loose ends. |
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