Opening scene for a play Options

[*mipadi*]

I was going through old notebooks in which I wrote down things that came to me while in school, and I came across this opening scene for a play I started about three years ago. I never wrote anymore, for whatever reason, but I have recently considered finishing it, or at least writing a few more scenes to see where it's headed. Anyway, here's the opening scene:

A BEDTIME STORY (or, TEA FOR TWO)

ACT I. SCENE I.

SCENE: A stage.

David, a young man, roughly college-age or so, enters a completely darkened stage. In the center of the stage is a stool. As he steps out slowly onto the stage, a harsh spotlight shines on him. He slowly walks to the stool and sits. He lights a cigarette.

DAVID: A bedtime story. Tell me a bedtime story. If you're a parent—which I am not—you've probably heard this a million times from your kids.

Unless your kids are grown up. No, I don't mean grown up, not all the way, at least. I mean, at that tender age when your children always seem to be depressed, and the only thing that seems to matter to them is that elusive thing we call "love."

Stands.

Ah, yes. There comes a time in any normal teenager's evolving life when he or she suddenly finds an interest in the handsome, popular football captain or the lovely young lady next door. A time when that fine young friend becomes the very center of his or her universe.

Assuming it works out, of course. Which it rarely seems to, does it? Why, to hear the kids these days tell it, they're all a bunch of depressed, suicidal romantics. No one has a chance!

Well, that's why I am here tonight, ladies and gentlemen. I'm going to tell you a story. A good story. A funny story. A bit sad in parts. There'll be laughs, there'll be tears. But it's all in fun.

Sits on another stool on stage right.

Maybe the story is a whole cliché, but I'll do my best to spice it up for you fine people.

Exit stage right.

The stage fades to complete darkness.

[KissMe2408]

Oh wow.
Impressive. I really am feeling this. I've done theatre since i was 9 years old. I find myself at the college reading through plays all the time, and sometimes picking monologues for auditions. I also like writing too. This catches the audiences attention. I really appreciated the directors notes in here. (spotlight, stands, sits on stool...etc.)
If i read this in the library, it would make me want to skip my next class and read the entire play right there.
So in other words, keep posting. I think you're off to a great start.

[Annie5332]

Im in love with it! I love how you really know what your talking about with the romances and the relationships that teenagers and young adults all go through. Its wonderful and I really hope you finish.

[*Azarel*]

asdf. This makes me want to read the rest of the script (that probably does not exist [yet]). Please continue it!

I like your (David's) take on the cliche teenage phase we all go through. Excellent usage of language.

[*mipadi*]

Thanks for the feedback! The whole play was going to be based on an experience I had. But that was back when I was a moody, lovesick teenager, so the details of the experience have been lost with time, and don't have as much bearing on my life anymore (or any bearing at all). Probably I'll just discard this piece, since I really don't have an emotional reservoir to tap regarding this subject.