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 Dec 13 2005, 09:29 PM
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This just flowed from me. It feels right.
A struggle from inside
Beneath the auricular surface Of a pandemic existance Beneath the flesh and encounters of the known A glory created Disposition A crusade against the mass Against the common form A struggle from inside -Ariel |
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Dec 13 2005, 09:41 PM
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 Call me Elsie Mae Group: Member Posts: 936 Joined: Aug 2005 Member No: 207,655 |
thats so emotional.
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Dec 14 2005, 12:11 AM
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beautiful. i liked it. it does have quite the nice flow to it.
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Dec 20 2005, 05:54 PM
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 ...who created this mess...? Group: Member Posts: 451 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 97,244 |
Oh, I like it! The words you used and the whole concept of the poem has a nice mood and flow to it. It's very deep. =]
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Dec 21 2005, 03:01 AM
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this is nice. sounds like one of those pieces you'd hear at a bar, and then everyone starts snapping fingers like, yeah, yeah.
i admit, i googled up some of these words at first, i was like what, what? |
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Dec 21 2005, 01:29 PM
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 I love Havasupai Group: Member Posts: 1,040 Joined: Jul 2005 Member No: 163,878 |
Props to your teachers and/or your ability to express through an innate gift of writing. I hope to see more posts from you in the future. What a wonderful digression from the typical angst and melodrama of this forum!
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Dec 21 2005, 05:16 PM
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that was awesome! it seemed so genuine and fresh. keep it up, ariel!
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