rap part 2, stay tuned... |
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| *Statistik* |
 Nov 16 2005, 04:07 PM
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I hustle till the sun come down, sun rise I wake up//
Back in the day my life was f**ked and it was hard to make up// But I fought through the daze (days), and I got shit submitted// My air force ones, jeans, and my new york fitted// (YEP!) I buy money, know wat i mean??? I bring cash flow// Only time you crash the audience is in a comedy show// Mannn...I'm chilling in the weather, but I can't tell the forecast// Cuz I'm getting a little hungry to death to rhyme, i still cant fasstttttt// (ouch) |
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Nov 16 2005, 04:19 PM
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 Bardic Nation  Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
do you really?
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Nov 16 2005, 08:41 PM
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 Bay Area YadadaDiiiig. Group: Official Member Posts: 4,249 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 103,202 |
The end confused me. I liked that Daze [days] thing though.
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Nov 16 2005, 10:54 PM
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QUOTE(brownsugar08 @ Nov 16 2005, 6:46 PM) The last line really confused me.   Agreed. It made me go "WTF?!" Oh and how do you BUY money? Are you involved with counterfeiting? |
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Nov 16 2005, 11:34 PM
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QUOTE(yummy_delight @ Nov 16 2005, 10:54 PM) Oh and how do you BUY money? Are you involved with counterfeiting? Exactly what I was thinking..... |
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| *nightmare4taki* |
Nov 17 2005, 08:52 PM
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OMG that was Crack Music!!!!!!!!!!!!!
QUOTE(Jason61992 @ Nov 16 2005, 3:07 PM) I buy money, know wat i mean??? I bring cash flow// Only time you crash the audience is in a comedy show// I know what you mean. Man that was a hella proper line. The reason why no one gets it is because its one of those Young Jeezy type lines. You get it? get it? QUOTE(Jason61992 @ Nov 16 2005, 3:07 PM) Mannn...I'm chilling in the weather, but I can't tell the forecast// Cuz I'm getting a little hungry to death to rhyme, i still cant fasstttttt// (ouch) The hunger for more. That was a very nice ending. Props and Hats off. |
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Nov 17 2005, 09:01 PM
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that was stupid
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Nov 17 2005, 09:16 PM
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QUOTE(sikdragon @ Nov 16 2005, 5:19 PM) do you really? what i was gonna say. do you actually do all that shit, or are you just saying it because? 
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Nov 18 2005, 11:34 AM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
I'll def give you props on your effort Jason, and the fact that you still post in here when 3/4 of the replies come back as "you suck" lol. Great job
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Nov 18 2005, 10:37 PM
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QUOTE I buy money, know wat i mean??? I bring cash flow// Only time you crash the audience is in a comedy show// i know what you mean. for those that dont get it, jasons lines are too advanced for you. wait 10 years and read it and youll feel like rkelly out of the closet QUOTE But I fought through the daze (days), and I got shit submitted// My air force ones, jeans, and my new york fitted// (YEP!) young jeezy would be proud |
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Nov 19 2005, 09:50 AM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
QUOTE Back in the day my life was f**ked and it was hard to make up// I don't think a gangsta wannabe can get any worse than this. You are sitting on a computer right now typing up these "rhymes" like you think you've even seen back in the day. |
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Nov 19 2005, 02:36 PM
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QUOTE(Paradox of Life @ Nov 19 2005, 9:50 AM) I don't think a gangsta wannabe can get any worse than this. You are sitting on a computer right now typing up these "rhymes" like you think you've even seen back in the day. Since when did I become a gangsta wannabe? |
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Nov 19 2005, 04:40 PM
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Yeah the end was confusing.
QUOTE But I fought through the daze (days), and I got shit submitted// My air force ones, jeans, and my new york fitted// (YEP!) Yeah I like that partt. |
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Nov 19 2005, 07:05 PM
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Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
if you know what fasting is, the end is not confusing.
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Nov 19 2005, 10:12 PM
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^LOL Robb you are slowman.
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| *Statistik* |
Nov 19 2005, 10:14 PM
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I can't consider rappers like 50 cent to be poets...
Poets = Kanye West, Common, Mos Def, Talib Kweli, Nas |
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Nov 20 2005, 01:17 AM
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Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
here's the rule. twista has talent, tupac has soul, and the rest can all go home.
Back on topic. Jason, you should try using poetic devices such as internal rhyme and alliteration. Helps keep the flow when writing in long lines. |
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Nov 22 2005, 10:20 AM
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My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
QUOTE(Jason61992 @ Nov 19 2005, 1:36 PM) Since when did I become a gangsta wannabe? "Kangsta"? "My air force ones, jeans, and my new york fitted// (YEP!)"? ... |
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| *Statistik* |
Nov 22 2005, 04:06 PM
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QUOTE(Paradox of Life @ Nov 22 2005, 10:20 AM) "Kangsta"? "My air force ones, jeans, and my new york fitted// (YEP!)"? ... Um, I know many koreans with the last name "Kang'" that nickname themself "Kangsta" and they don't certainly act like one aka "Wannabe"...Air Force Ones? How is that dressing gangsta? I've seen many geeks who wear them..they're just stylish sneakers...My new york fitted? OK, It's a f**king hat dumb ass, and it's a 'High-Quality' made by New Era. I wear it only when my hair is short. Jeans?  Just shut the f**k up and dont post, Katt. |
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