Title-less, But would love some feedback! Options

[Ansata]

The door in my ceiling opens to your floor.
Can you hear me screaming, crying for more?
Wrapped in insecurities, you whisper your love.
So true, so pure, so tainted like a dove.
Is this a caffeine high, or an IV drip?
A deep depression, or an ego trip?
This frame of bones, they once were wings.
Now I’m just a puppet, hanging from strings.
Do you like my smile on a stick?
If I hold it just right it seems to do the trick.
Rabbit ears or devil horns, pick your label.
Regardless of your threats, I am not stable.
Down my legs, just like yarn unraveled.
You have no idea how far my soul has traveled.
As horrible as it seems, I want to scare you,
I want to make your nightmares come true.
An empty highway, the yellow line divides.
See that carcass? That’s where my core resides.
Do you want a dying, wish, whisper, thought?
Ooops, sorry! This is all your karma bought.
Do I make you giggle? Do I make you twinge?
Or am I just your guilty late night binge?
I hate this song, I’ve heard it a million times.
Such a cliche, so many worn out rhymes.
But sometimes nothing seems to quite relate.
Like a whinny, emo, heart, so full of hate.
I’m just a worthless, broken, loser,
Just some kind of impulsive abuser.
Like the dirty bum you see on the street.
With stains in his beard, maggots on his feet.
So analyze this moment, try to read between the lines.
So when you wake up alone,know I left you signs.

Thanks in advance!

[illumineering]

I thought this line was most effective in conveying the meaning of your work...

I want to make your nightmares come true.

The possibilities are rather haunting!

[Ansata]

lol Aren't they though?

=)

And thanks!

[Lightner]

thats really good i rather enjoyed reading that, you should put these on a blog for easy access, i guarentee u others wouldnt mind reading them =)

[shesnothxc]

great job, i liked how it was almost a rant but one that flows nicely and all ties together in the end

[Ansata]

Thanks so much Lightner, and that's a good idea, I apprechiate it =)

And thanks shesnothxc! It was a rant, but a fun one lol.

[o0olaalaa]

wow! thats really good! great job =)

[_suzie_]

yes, i really enjoyed that. the way you;ve written it adds to the effect methinks. i love poetry

[Ansata]

Thanks guys, glad you enjoyed it =)

And _suzie_ I love your avatar lol