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 Nov 4 2005, 09:38 PM
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 My desperate heart is far too weak to run for you this long.  Group: Member Posts: 640 Joined: Jun 2005 Member No: 150,342  |
Your Charm
I'm just a useless heart held on a silver chain on your fragile wrist and going insane you spin me around inbetween your fingers or I'm on your shelf left to sit and linger pick me up again and grasp me tight hold on like you won't let go and won't let me out of sight she says she can't live without you so you drop me on the ground i fall ever so gently, left with invisible bruises that don't make sound -------------------------- yep. i was oh so bored last night. |
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Nov 6 2005, 08:27 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 71 Joined: Aug 2005 Member No: 203,356 |
I think that it's pretty good, very visual, i can relate to this
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Nov 6 2005, 10:00 PM
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 some reason i feel alone...guess cus my true self is never shown Group: Member Posts: 303 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 246,804 |
oh thats like doesnt seem like there emotion in it but sad
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Nov 6 2005, 10:00 PM
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 ladybugs are hot <3 Group: Member Posts: 1,169 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,802 |
i like it =)
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| *not_your_average* |
Nov 6 2005, 10:45 PM
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Excellent use of metaphor. I especially enjoyed the second verse. Keep it up!
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| *stephinika* |
Nov 7 2005, 01:35 AM
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^^
agreed. its well put together. keep it up! |
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