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Ghosts, my article
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post Nov 6 2005, 06:37 PM
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Now, I wasn't sure if this belonged in homework or writing but I figured it fell into more of the writing category. I was wondering if you guys can give me some feedback on my article. I wanna know if theres anything I can do to improve it.

“It was in the middle of the night, and I went for my usual bathroom visit. The bathroom door was just a few feet down the hallway from our bedroom. I would keep the light on in the bathroom all night, so I could see Hannah, if she needed me, for a diaper change, or for a nursing. I had lain back down in bed. I looked at out door and saw a red glow in the hallway, this red smoky glow floated into the bedroom, at the foot of our bed, around my husband’s side of the bed. It quickly went under the bed. As I lay there, watching this happen. I had a real eerie feeling that it wanted the baby. I put my arms around Hannah and remember thinking “You’re NOT getting her.” I feel asleep, chanting that over and over in my mind. I don’t know what it was, but I do know I wasn’t dreaming.”
Robin Simms had not seen a fire or an ordinary light from the bathroom. What else could have been her reason? Ghosts. According to tradition, a ghost is a spirit of a dead person that visits the living. Many ghosts are malevolent, which means they try to do harm. Most malevolent ghosts haunt the place where, in their real form, they had died or were buried. Some people believe in ghosts, some don’t. But how else would they explain strange noises during the night or having their furniture and other objects move by themselves?
Another way people have encountered ghosts is through a horrifying game called Ouiji, used by playing with an Ouiji board. According to the dictionary, an Ouiji board is a board with the alphabet on it; used with a planchette to spell out supernatural messages. “Yes, I have played with the Ouiji board, but no exactly the game board. We made it ourselves and a lot of freaky things happened. One of my friends who was pregnant, which at that time she didn’t know she was pregnant contacted a little boy. He said his name was Momo. He said his mom killed him and that he felt unloved. He told my friend that she was going to give birth to Momo in January. She got freaked out. The boy answered “Don’t be afraid, mommy.” A couple of months later, she DID have a baby boy in January. We used a shot glass to play and as you keep playing, you’ll see the glass start to fill with smoke.” replied Anna of 16.
Anna strongly warned to not play the terrifying game in your house, for once the game is brought into the house, and the spirit comes into the house as well. And once you start playing, you must finish and complete the spirits dirtiest request before it’s able to leave the house. Most of the ghost encounters have been children who have died so many years ago. And since this caught my attention, I decided to take a survey on whether ghost or ghost children were scarier. And majority ruled: ghosts children. “They’re the ones who want to scare you the most, they like having fun”, says Isteak of class 812.
No one knows for sure if ghosts exist or not. But the modern day movies today have our minds poisoned with mystery. After watching The Grudge, 13-year-old Amy Zheng replies, “The little ghost children’s eyes are so weird. Their jet black or even worse, they have no eyes at all.” We’ll never know for sure if ghosts exist or not. I guess we’ll just have to see, and wait for a mysterious transparency of unexplainable terror—ghosts.

Some of the names I had to makeup because I didn't really know the names. And if you're clever you'd know I got some of the stories from cB.
 

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