Tonight, Acoustic song for Beth |
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| *RockizLife* |
 Aug 11 2005, 03:41 PM
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To my friend Beth.
Tonight This is my thanks to you For all you've done and still do For all the times I was alone at night Then thinking about how you make my days bright And teaching me to have confidence For making life not seem so dense Tonight we'll fly away And laugh at those who said it's impossible We'll fly towards tomorrow today With you, everything is plausible With the stars as our ceiling The sea as our floor We'll find our friendship is more then a feeling It's what makes us soar I'll be here when your world turns upside down When your beautiful smile turns into a frown To try my best to make it better for you For your happiness there's nothing in this world I won't do And in the times you have to fly on your own I'll be down here waiting without feelings of being alone Because you will always have a place in my heart Something that is impossible is for us to be apart Tonight we'll fly away And laugh at those who said it's impossible We'll fly towards tomorrow today With you, everything is plausible With the stars as our ceiling The sea as our floor We'll find our friendship is more then a feeling It's what makes us soar Forget about our past We'll make this moment last I'll watch the wind comb your hair As we fly through midnights air See the stars glimmer in the sea Nothing more perfect could ever be Tonight we'll fly away And laugh at those who said it's impossible We'll fly towards tomorrow today With you, everything is plausible With the stars as our ceiling The sea as our floor We'll find our friendship is more then a feeling It's what makes us soar My friend, I love you You're more beautiful then the heavens above you You make life feel right So let's leave, let's fly away tonight |
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Aug 11 2005, 04:12 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you!  Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
Corny and cliche. You keep changing rhyming schemes, but I suppose there's some pattern there. Blah, I personally don't like this one. I guess I'm just in a pessimistic, sadistic mood right now because this is so cheesy I want to vomit.
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Aug 16 2005, 06:26 PM
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 Residential Crazy Child Group: Member Posts: 934 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 116,897 |
^Wow...that's rough. I'm sorry, but I have to agree. The rhyme scheme wasn't that great and it was kind of cliche.
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Aug 22 2005, 10:06 PM
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^ Haha, cool. But, remember, it's not a poem and songs either do or don't have much rhyme scheme, if any at all. It's ok, you don't know what you're talking about
 Trust me, I took a singing/song writing course at school.And Beth LOVED it, and that's all that matters. She pinned it up on her wall 
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Aug 23 2005, 09:40 AM
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sorry but i have to agree that the rhyme scheme was bad but as long as your friend like it thats all that matters
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