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 Jul 30 2005, 02:29 AM
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Before she went to bed, she'd brush her teeth and hair,
she'd scrub her face clean, using all her utmost care . Then she'd look into the mirror, to examine her reflection, and there her face was bare, wiped clean of all deception . There drawn upon her face was hurt, all her troubles of the day, the water had washed the glue of her paste-on smile away . And her two tired tear-brimmed eyes were looking back at her, with a voice full of defeat, she whispered to the mirror, " Dear Mirror, i look at you, and i cant recognize who i see, with her lifeless expression and dead eyes, could this girl truly be me ? " And as night went on, she cried herself to sleep, for throughout her day, she had gone through much grief . And in the morning, she'd wake up, brush her teeth and hair, she'd scrub her face clean, using all her utmost care . She'd take the time to apply make-up, to hide the pain etched on her face, and as she walked outdoors, she'd make sure her paste-on smile was in place . |
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Jul 30 2005, 01:55 PM
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 sorry. i drowned your fish. Group: Member Posts: 1,485 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 98,683 |
thats nicely-written. i can kinda relate =T
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Jul 30 2005, 02:11 PM
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 I'll never be who I was again.. Group: Member Posts: 2,886 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 77,981 |
I like it..
I can really relate to it.. Good job! 
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Jul 30 2005, 02:18 PM
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I really really liked this, It was well done. Yeah, I can relate.
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Jul 30 2005, 03:00 PM
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 you & i collide Group: Member Posts: 324 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 131,155 |
I really liked it. I can kind of relate too.
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Jul 30 2005, 03:39 PM
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 Residential Crazy Child Group: Member Posts: 934 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 116,897 |
I like it. Appearantly a lot of people can relate, which is always a nice thing.
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Jul 30 2005, 10:49 PM
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 Change Gon Come Group: Member Posts: 2,286 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,822 |
i think you'd make a fine rapper. =]
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Jul 31 2005, 05:19 AM
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Thats reallly really nice. I love how everything just kind of flows.
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Jul 31 2005, 06:29 AM
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 creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
woww, thats so awesome. just when i thought all the rhyming was gonna ruin it it turned out really great and effective. nice writing!
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Jul 31 2005, 10:28 AM
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 Semi-Retarded Member Group: Member Posts: 549 Joined: Jul 2005 Member No: 175,317 |
wow. that's one awesome poem!
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Jul 31 2005, 04:06 PM
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very nicely written. it flows well and the concept is nice and relateable. keep it up!
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Aug 1 2005, 02:53 AM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
Beautiful. It was very nicely written. One of my personal favorites here.
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