my rap, awesome-n-hot [possible dejayyy diss] |
| *Statistik* |
 Jul 11 2005, 07:45 PM
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LEAVE CONTRUCTIVE CRITICISM OR DON'T POST AT ALL. DO NOT USE OFFENSIVE LANGUAGE IN THESE "BATTLES", WHICH INCLUDES OFFENSIVE RACIAL SLURS.
YOU ALL HAVE BEEN WARNED. -Fae Yo I'm just trying to prove my point// I'm trying to make this a burning hot joint// Y'all people can't feel my rhymes and lines// Ask the cop why I got over 5,000 fines// My girls got more taste on me than bud light// All you gotta do is holla and i'll make ya tight// I'm gonna take this shit to the hardcore extreme// I'm like The Game because I get nightmares and dreams// Yeah dejayyyy my name is jason..// I'm attempting to get a trace-in// You're freddy kreuger? oh man i'm going to get feared// Ask all my hip-hop fans, they'll say I always get cheered// If you wanna be freddy dejayyy, you must be afraid of fire// Damn, That's pity no wonder you can't get any higher// When I get retired, The Kangsta will be remembered// So i'm gonna finish you off, i hope you get dismembered// Yeah you are the game dejayyyy because i always play you// First improve your freestyles bytch and I will pay you// Yeah i'm 50 cent because I get a lot of beef// Call me the king because I'm always the cheef// And now one more thing dejayyy don't disrespect me// I achieved more than you losa, I'm always connected// Call me the hard mirror, because I'm always reflected// This post has been edited by uninspiredfae: Jul 15 2005, 12:30 AM |
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| *wind&fire* |
Jul 11 2005, 07:46 PM
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you can drive?
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Jul 11 2005, 08:13 PM
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 .  Group: Member Posts: 1,488 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,625 |
This is yet another example of why you need to get a life.
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Jul 11 2005, 08:13 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 41 Joined: Jul 2005 Member No: 171,391 |
If you are interested, I am looking for new rappers and DJs for my new label. Here is a link. http://www.nobodysmiling.com/hiphop/news/71563.php
If you are interested, mail a tape to the address below. Baseline Recording Studios 127 W 26th St Rm 801 New York 10001 |
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Jul 11 2005, 10:53 PM
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 Bay Area YadadaDiiiig. Group: Official Member Posts: 4,249 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 103,202 |
omgoodness. please do NOT give the boy hope. then he'll think hes achieving at something hes not good at.
cant you talk about things normal 13 yr olds go through ? if you lived in a ghetto ass place w/ all these gangsta shit yu talk about then id understand your raps. but yu live in a nice suburb in jersey and go to a nice school probably lfull of kids who beat you up because you act like your from some ghetto ass town. |
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| *RockizLife* |
Jul 11 2005, 11:09 PM
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God. Help this young
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Jul 11 2005, 11:10 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
"Yo I'm just trying to prove my point//
I'm trying to make this a burning hot joint//" A burning hot joint? You smoke? Would you like me to alert the police? noun: marijuana leaves rolled into a cigarette for smoking noun: junction by which parts or objects are joined together noun: a disreputable place of entertainment noun: (anatomy) the point of connection between two bones or elements of a skeleton (especially if the articulation allows motion) noun: a piece of meat roasted or for roasting and of a size for slicing into more than one portion noun: the shape or manner in which things come together and a connection is made Sorry, but those lines made no sense. Because you have no point. Y'all people can't feel my rhymes and lines// Ask the cop why I got over 5,000 fines// Jason, no one WANTS to feel your rhymes and lines. Violating the law over 5000 times isn't something to be proud of. My girls got more taste on me than bud light// All you gotta do is holla and i'll make ya tight// What girls? You'll make them tight? Jesus, please spare me. I'm gonna take this shit to the hardcore extreme// I'm like The Game because I get nightmares and dreams// You don't even know what hardcore is. And everyone has nightmares and dreams, you idiot. Yeah dejayyyy my name is jason..// I'm attempting to get a trace-in// You're freddy kreuger? oh man i'm going to get feared// Ask all my hip-hop fans, they'll say I always get cheered// "Get feared" makes no sense. You need to learn your grammar, son. If you wanna be freddy dejayyy, you must be afraid of fire// Damn, That's pity no wonder you can't get any higher// No, Jason, you're a pity. When I get retired, The Kangsta will be remembered// So i'm gonna finish you off, i hope you get dismembered// Lmfao. I HOPE YOU GET DISMEMBERED, BITCH! Yeah you are the game dejayyyy because i always play you// First improve your freestyles bytch and I will pay you// YOU PLAY WITH DJ? And was the second line supposed to be an insult? You don't tell someone you're dissing to improve their rhymes so you can pay them. Yeah i'm 50 cent because I get a lot of beef// Call me the king because I'm always the cheef// No, Jason.. No, you're not the CHIEF. And now one more thing dejayyy don't disrespect me// Where did this line come from? I achieved more than you losa, I'm always connected// Call me the hard mirror, because I'm always reflected// That made no sense whatsoever. Alright, I'm done with my analyzation of your rhymes. Don't take it personally. While other people freestyle, I'd rather use logic. |
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Jul 11 2005, 11:33 PM
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 dripping destruction Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 7,282 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 21,929 |
GOD. boy, get your syncapation right, your rhymes right, and your rythm right. don't forget the meter too.
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Jul 11 2005, 11:40 PM
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 Lil JC Group: Member Posts: 868 Joined: May 2005 Member No: 145,741 |
QUOTE Call me the hard mirror, because I'm always reflected yeah it makes no sense dude GET A LIFE if you suck stop rappin get a ghost writer or somethin damn c'mon |
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| *CrackedRearView* |
Jul 12 2005, 01:30 AM
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Do you have to ruin the writing forum with this drivel?
Use another forum -- there are probably some idiots in the entertainment section that would appreciate this. But if you're going to post here, try and make it something with a little more substance and seriousness than this crock. Thanks. |
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Jul 12 2005, 08:49 AM
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 The Lyricist Group: Member Posts: 126 Joined: Jul 2005 Member No: 168,967 |
Lol everywhere I go this kid gets nothing but hate.
Here's something....more on the positive side I suppose. I'm glad your interested in hip hop, it's a great thing bro. But you gotta realize that true hip hop comes from the real. Can't be talkin' bout shit you got no idea about and try to play it off. Be real, be yourself. Polish your flow, practice makes perfect. I've been in the game for about two years now and I still suck like no other. But I keep at it. It's my passion. Hip hop is life. If you're serious about it, hit me up and we can work together. My hyungs and friends that emcee or dj or produce always helped me and still help me so I'm always down to help out another cat if I can. my AIM is JxDragonz. hope to hear from you. One. |
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Jul 12 2005, 01:09 PM
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 wanderlust personified. Group: Official Designer Posts: 7,515 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 797 |
^ We diss him because he doesn't write his lyrics. He's got a ghostwriter.
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Jul 12 2005, 01:13 PM
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 L!ckitySplit Group: Member Posts: 4,325 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 129,329 |
^ ya she did
i thought he said he was gonna write his own lyrics from now on. he should at least get a better writer. |
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Jul 12 2005, 01:37 PM
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Bay Area YadadaDiiiig. Group: Official Member Posts: 4,249 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 103,202 |
QUOTE But you gotta realize that true hip hop comes from the real. Can't be talkin' bout shit you got no idea about and try to play it off. Be real, be yourself. Polish your flow, practice makes perfect. I've been in the game for about two years now and I still suck like no other. But I keep at it. It's my passion. Hip hop is life. If you're serious about it, hit me up and we can work together EXACTLYYY.hiphop=<3. hee hee thats my myspace name. anyway back to topic. freal. write about what you KNOW. not what you see and hear on media or music and such. |
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Jul 12 2005, 01:41 PM
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 music messiah mastered money makin' mathematically Group: Member Posts: 602 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 112,886 |
dissing me back, eh jason?! hahaha. don't worry. I made a diss back for you. check it out =] nice one.
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Jul 12 2005, 01:43 PM
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music messiah mastered money makin' mathematically Group: Member Posts: 602 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 112,886 |
FROM NOW ON, ALL THE DISSES SHALL BE POSTED IN THE LOUNGE. TO MAKE "CERTAIN" PEOPLE HAPPY. =]
-De112 okay, so jason dissed me back. once again, this is all for fun. here's my diss to jason, a new one. it's not my best one... =/ you may have to read jason's diss to get what i'm saying in some of my lines. as a matter of fact, READ JASONS DISS FIRST, then you'll get mine =] Jasons: Jason's Diss mine is below. listen kid, I swear your cds gonna flop// you say your "rhymes so sick"// someone get this kid a cough drop!// maybe then, you'd understand// "DeJay" isn't just my name, its my one man band// what's all this crap that you "live in the ghetto"?// man when I'm done with you, you'll be rockin' stilettos// HA, "Ask the cop why I got over 5,000 fines"// I don't know, maybe it's just 'cause you don't write your own lines!// So stop actin' like you're something, you're not man// you're just a fan, like eminem's old song called stan// so take some time, write some good hooks// i'll give you a pen, plus a free notebook!// Dissin' you, has to be a crime// So "ask the cop why I got over 5,000 fines"// =]  ahaa.comments. |
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Jul 12 2005, 01:46 PM
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L!ckitySplit Group: Member Posts: 4,325 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 129,329 |
lol yaaaaaay!
*claps* |
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Jul 12 2005, 01:47 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 785 Joined: May 2005 Member No: 143,525 |
DJ, everyday you seem to amaze me. <3 That shit is awesome, yo.
 lets keep this up, waiting for Jason's diss now. mwahahaha. QUOTE HA, "Ask the cop why I got over 5,000 fines"// I don't know, maybe it's just 'cause you don't write your own lines!// jason you have just been pwned. whatcha gonna do about it?  QUOTE Dissin' you, has to be a crime// So "ask the cop why I got over 5,000 fines"// oh shit this is getting better and better. 
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Jul 12 2005, 02:12 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 785 Joined: May 2005 Member No: 143,525 |
jason, honestly you went all over the place and it made no sense, it had nothing to do with DJ. you guys need to check out DJ's diss back. mwahaha
-oh and btw jason, i have nothing against you...i aint gonna lie but DJ did a better job at dissing you. nice try though 
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Jul 12 2005, 02:34 PM
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 Holla if ya hate me Group: Member Posts: 2,386 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 80,819 |
Shit is awesome man! hahahah
Jason just gets pwned time and time again Love it |
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| *Azarel* |
Jul 12 2005, 02:37 PM
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Stop ruining the writing forum with your childish mindless rhymes, kids. Post this bullshit in entertainment or something. Or even better, don't post it at all. Grow up.
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Jul 12 2005, 02:43 PM
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music messiah mastered money makin' mathematically Group: Member Posts: 602 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 112,886 |
QUOTE(Azarel @ Jul 12 2005, 1:37 PM) Stop ruining the writing forum with your childish mindless rhymes, kids. Post this bullshit in entertainment or something. Or even better, don't post it at all. Grow up.  whoa calm down, kid. it's a joke, me and jason are both doing it for laughs, everyone else finds it funny so calm down. the forum doesn't always have to be so uptight man. |
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| *jooleeah* |
Jul 12 2005, 02:48 PM
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That was amusing.
Wow...
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| *Azarel* |
Jul 12 2005, 02:51 PM
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QUOTE(De112 @ Jul 12 2005, 12:43 PM) whoa calm down, kid. it's a joke, me and jason are both doing it for laughs, everyone else finds it funny so calm down. the forum doesn't always have to be so uptight man. I really don't care what your motives are, whether it be for laughs or for real. It's immature and stupid, and I'm sick of it spamming up writing. This crap isn't even deserving enough to be called a piece of "writing." You want to keep up your immature rivalry? You want to sink down to the level of a twelve-year-old? Go do it in entertainment; after all, that's what "raps" are. Writing is to be appreciated, to break a threshhold.This is no where near worthy of being called "writing." |
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Jul 12 2005, 02:53 PM
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music messiah mastered money makin' mathematically Group: Member Posts: 602 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 112,886 |
QUOTE(Azarel @ Jul 12 2005, 1:51 PM) I really don't care what your motives are, whether it be for laughs or for real. It's immature and stupid, and I'm sick of it spamming up writing. This crap isn't even deserving enough to be called a piece of "writing." You want to keep up your immature rivalry? You want to sink down to the level of a twelve-year-old? Go do it in entertainment; after all, that's what "raps" are. Writing is to be appreciated, to break a threshhold. This is no where near worthy of being called "writing." that's your own personal opinoin though. as though I do respect it...i don't care for it. writing is writing, raps or poems or anything. everyone has their own way. like i said, the forum doesn't have to be so uptight. |
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