Amorous Apathy |
 Jul 7 2005, 12:11 AM
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 The Lost Dreamer  Group: Member Posts: 67 Joined: Jul 2005 Member No: 166,502  |
"Amorous Apathy"
Atrocious actions upon myself Malevolent love for my own hell Outlining my existance to others Realistic hopes to find a lover Overturned heartache from the past Underestimated pressure came on fast Selfish desires that would not last Allowing myself to be used Percieving others and their clues Alone in this lovely dark Thoughtless in my own park Hateful for those that do not understand Yearning for at least one to take my hand Another way of looking at the title is: "Loving Carelessness." |
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Jul 7 2005, 02:32 AM
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 creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
that was a niceread :). im sort of annoyed by all the poems i see starting with adjectives, though. to me, if you write a poem like that, it has to be REALLY good
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Jul 9 2005, 01:19 AM
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Mr. Hottie Group: Member Posts: 406 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 104,225 |
i like your poems, this one is apathized. just some emphusizism.
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Jul 9 2005, 01:27 AM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
Wow i really do like your work. You really like to focus on love, and i'm a hopeless romantic so i do enjoy reading your poem :) lol Ah, my favorite part was right at the end,
"Hateful for those that do not understand Yearning for at least one to take my hand" Wonderful job! you def have talent |
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