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 Jun 26 2005, 12:09 AM
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 dripping destruction  Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 7,282 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 21,929  |
acid dry
my eyes dripped acid on my heart it puddled at my feet a little tap; i came apart you reveled in conceit the morbid bile rose in my throat as time struck forth through time and so i sat, and then i wrote a poem with hate and rhyme it talked of deeds done in the past it talked of lies told to my soul it whispered secrets emptied fast it screamed out of that hole i look down at my empty heart i look and see the acid dry i know now life will never start until the day i die "acid dry" © 2005 by me |
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Jun 28 2005, 02:24 PM
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 What a hypocrite. Group: Member Posts: 2,754 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 128,150 |
I don't understand the pain the author is going through, but the poem itself is wonderful. =)
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Jun 28 2005, 02:30 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,732 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 119,327 |
QUOTE(sadolakced acid @ Jun 26 2005, 12:09 AM) the morbid bile rose in my throat  Awesome poem. Especially that line. |
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Jun 28 2005, 02:49 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 893 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 68,217 |
Love it.
QUOTE i know now life will never start until they day i die You ended it very well. (That "y" in "they" is a typo, right...) |
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Jul 4 2005, 11:18 PM
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dripping destruction Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 7,282 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 21,929 |
QUOTE(ApocalypseAelis @ Jun 28 2005, 2:49 PM) Love it. You ended it very well. (That "y" in "they" is a typo, right...) ahh yes, that is a typo. thanks for catching that. |
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Jul 9 2005, 01:27 AM
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Mr. Hottie Group: Member Posts: 406 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 104,225 |
sounds bitter.
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