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 Jun 4 2005, 09:41 PM
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drip-drop, drip-drop,
blood pours, her heart stops . screams shouts cries yells nobody's here, nobody tells . kill cut torture slash life's gone in, just one flash . hurt her beat her brutally stab her hell is close but revenge is sweeter . ---- short , but yeah (: |
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Jun 4 2005, 09:43 PM
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 skaters gonna skate. Group: Official Member Posts: 6,861 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 6,336 |
heheh, that's evil but good. i like it.
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Jun 4 2005, 10:37 PM
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 im addicted to my car<3 Group: Member Posts: 635 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 92,236 |
wow.. hmm is there a name for poems written in that form? i think there is but i cant remember what. anyway good job
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Jun 5 2005, 08:32 AM
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wow i dont even consider that as a poem
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Jun 5 2005, 02:48 PM
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lol nice
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Jun 5 2005, 06:04 PM
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QUOTE(Jason61992 @ Jun 5 2005, 8:32 AM) wow i dont even consider that as a poem  then what would you call it if you consider it a poem ? 
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Jun 5 2005, 09:20 PM
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 ticktock. Group: Member Posts: 1,138 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 118,235 |
QUOTE heheh, that's evil but good. i like it. exactly what i was going to say |
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Jun 5 2005, 09:21 PM
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Oh how sexy. Ahaha, niceeeee. I love the rhythm to it. Nice and short. Good job!
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Jun 6 2005, 03:11 AM
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very well written i love these sort of poems my only criticism would be instead of "gotta hurt her and beat her" maybe it should be "gotta hurt her, gotta beat her" hmm what do you think?
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