Angel from Above |
 Jun 1 2005, 08:56 PM
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Jun 1 2005, 09:09 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
 that was like sooooo good lol but yeah, very well written you capture alot of every day life and expirience, good catch on the emotions and choice of words. Rhyme scheme is good better than your last one  but anyways it was good...GOOD JOB  YOU ROCK MY SOCKS !! HAHAHAH
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Jun 2 2005, 05:42 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
Wow, that was very good. The rhymes are perfect and so is the flow. Kind of unoriginal though, but then again it's an expression of your own feelings so it shouldn't matter.
 I don't know if delirium fits well though. It means a state of mental agitation or a state of confusion often accompanied by hallucinations. 
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Jun 2 2005, 08:07 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
Yay, we have another love poet on our hands! I liked this one, the rhyme sceme was very good. Keep it up! =D
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Jun 4 2005, 01:57 AM
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lol not cliche' very original. i love the dangling from cupid's arrow part =).
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