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 May 25 2005, 02:04 PM
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 i've never wanted anything rationale.  Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,449 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,045  |
Tralalalalala
As the pulsating beads of water Hit my bare skin All that has gone wrong today Seems to melt away My hands caress Every inch of my steamy body Slowly I begin to relax Everything will be allright Those 30 minutes Are priceless It is the one place that is mine My safe haven Each minute spent Feels like an eternity An eternity of happiness As my pain drips down the drain |
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May 25 2005, 09:19 PM
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 This is all my luck, it's all I got. Group: Member Posts: 1,373 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 76,532 |
I like it a lot. In a way to me its kinda true. Great work. =]
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May 26 2005, 08:58 PM
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 iuvenesco Group: Member Posts: 427 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 101,221 |
Very nice, totally relatable. I just had a hot shower cuz I was feelin down
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May 28 2005, 12:52 AM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,575 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,957 |
...you take thirty minute showers
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May 28 2005, 03:43 AM
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^ haha that's what i was thinking.
good job. great imagery. and very relateable lol. |
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May 28 2005, 08:14 AM
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Nothing like a nice warm shower. I like it.
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May 28 2005, 11:08 AM
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i've never wanted anything rationale. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,449 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,045 |
QUOTE(william @ May 27 2005, 10:52 PM) ...you take thirty minute showers ? Of course dear!! I need some time to clear my head. Most of it is just standing under the water like...relaxing haha |
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May 29 2005, 07:30 PM
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 RiKACHANtEL Group: Member Posts: 3,876 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,230 |
i take 30 minute showers too. i can clear my head in the shower. i dont mean to take so long...time goes by fast.
ohh to remain on topic...this is really good. i can dig it! |
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May 29 2005, 08:19 PM
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 The Best Thing Since Instant Soup Group: Member Posts: 815 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 104,928 |
QUOTE(william @ May 28 2005, 12:52 AM) ...you take thirty minute showers ?Those are my kind of showers... lol I like taking long showers since.. well.. you get a lot of alone time with water. Nice poem.. It describes details well. |
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May 29 2005, 09:00 PM
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 that heaven is overrated Group: Member Posts: 5,096 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 53,124 |
Haha yeah. Long showers are relaxing. Nice poem, Rachel. It's definitely very relatable.
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May 30 2005, 05:17 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Posts: 8,274 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 8,001 |
lmao, i love doing that ! .. my sister tells for hogging the bathroom so long. =[ .. but i always find time for it.
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May 30 2005, 02:18 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 52 Joined: May 2005 Member No: 133,454 |
nice poem
 lol yeah you tell yourself one more minute....and then you can't help but stay longer 
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May 30 2005, 10:13 PM
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</3 Group: Member Posts: 346 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 84,729 |
Nice poem
great job!
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Jun 8 2005, 01:43 PM
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QUOTE(xxcrazyjewxx @ May 28 2005, 12:08 PM) Of course dear!! I need some time to clear my head. Most of it is just standing under the water like...relaxing haha My dad yells at me to get out if I am in more than 10 minutes.  But when I'm at college, I take them as long as I possibly can.Nice poem, though. Very relaxing...not as relaxing as a warm shower, but thinking about one sure is nice. |
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Jun 8 2005, 08:06 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
Wow, that's really good. It's written really well and I like how it ends. Nice free verse.
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Jun 10 2005, 02:48 PM
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 ♥ Group: Official Member Posts: 4,066 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,393 |
Rachel, dear, you just made me have dirty thoughts about you in the shower.
Ha. Ha. Ha. But seriously. That's a great poem, m'dear. You certainly do have a way with words, love. 
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