I thought..., You were mine? |
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 May 16 2005, 05:56 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you!  Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674  |
Desperation
Slowly slipping, Fading, Disappearing from my grasp, I thought you were mine, Thought you loved me, But I was wrong, So very wrong, So confused, Emotions tangled, Biting anger, And crushing sorrow, Never content, Wanting you still, But I can’t have you, Never, You’re out of my grasp, You’ve slipped away, Faded away, Disappeared. My feelings right now. |
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May 16 2005, 06:04 PM
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 Change Gon Come Group: Member Posts: 2,286 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,822 |
i know how you feel.
I thought the poem was good. Its rhythm is everywhere, but i like that, cause you're feelings are kinda everywhere too.. |
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May 16 2005, 06:56 PM
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i love how its written...fits well with what you're writing about. i hope you feel better.
 nice job though. 
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May 16 2005, 09:09 PM
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 ticktock. Group: Member Posts: 1,138 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 118,235 |
i like the way the poem is formatted. with only a couple of words on each line. nice job.
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May 17 2005, 12:07 AM
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 Food. Group: Member Posts: 667 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 112,545 |
How ironic, my friend's boyfriend just broke up with her an hour ago, and she said stuff similar to this poem. I guess she feels the same way you do. Hope things work out with whatever is wrong.
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May 17 2005, 01:44 AM
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 boo Group: Member Posts: 5,512 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 71,765 |
That's awesome, I can really feel it. =)
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May 21 2005, 01:55 PM
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awwww....cheerup! awsome poem!
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