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 May 2 2005, 02:17 AM
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QUOTE Um, your whole post made absolutely no sense and it has nothing to do with the poem. I don't even think you know what you're talking about. And if she wanted to write it the way she did, that's her way of writing poetry. Basically you're just trying to get her to write like you. Constructive criticizm is where you actually say something about flow or rhyming. Deepness is entirely the author's decision. You've posted on one of my boards and you act like you know everything about poetry but you're just an annoying smartass. dry.gif And Bambi's mom got shot, not his dad. I saw the movie yesterday mad.gif oh, what happened to his dad? i really dont remember, but you got my point anyway. what did my post have to do with the poem? nothing. It was more of a mindset to help anyone who wanted to affect someone with their poetry to use when writing things in the future. to tell you the truth, it started out as critique, but i kind of got off topic by a lot. QUOTE i've come to the conclusion that "sikdragon" is a total idiot trying to sound intelligent. i've come to the conclusion that you're a hatemonger. that's the same attitude KKK members have when they look at black people. Im ashamed of humans who think like that. QUOTE agreed happy.gif it's not quite as bad for you, you're just a follower. however, the men who followed hitler still took part in the murders, tortures, and slaughters of millions of innocent people. |
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May 2 2005, 02:21 AM
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May 2 2005, 02:52 AM
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Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
you're funny.
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May 2 2005, 12:22 PM
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 Quand j'étais jeune... Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 6,826 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 1,272 |
Hey dudes/dudettes, lets quit it now, okay?
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May 5 2005, 07:03 PM
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Poetry does not usually need criticism, unless they ask for it. Since this is an emotional and personal poem, what can tell them how/how not to write?...Anyway..wow, I love this poem. It's absolutely beautiful.
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May 6 2005, 11:26 AM
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Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
by putting it in here they ask for criticism. or maybe i miss the point of the reply button.
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May 9 2005, 06:25 PM
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QUOTE Hey dudes/dudettes, lets quit it now, okay? Yes, please???  Peace on cB. |
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May 9 2005, 06:45 PM
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That made me sad, good job.
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May 9 2005, 09:39 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 893 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 68,217 |
AkaRyux wtf did you take my signature for?! I worked hard on that; if you want to use it JUST ASK ME.
Anyway, I love the poem. Very deep. Great job. 
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May 9 2005, 10:17 PM
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 ich heisse Meli. Group: Member Posts: 909 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 122,016 |
oh my god, I love that. My best friend died when I was... *thinks*... well, in eighth grade. I totally know how you feel/felt.
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May 11 2005, 03:04 PM
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 Another ditch in the road... you keep moving Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152 |
QUOTE what did my post have to do with the poem? nothing. It was more of a mindset to help anyone who wanted to affect someone with their poetry to use when writing things in the future. to tell you the truth, it started out as critique, but i kind of got off topic by a lot. there's no correct way to write peotry. you're trying to sterelize a creative process. sometimes, its best not to throw in a load of description, it softens impact. othertimes, it works. you cant give 'general advice' for writing poetry, it doesnt work that way. |
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May 11 2005, 04:17 PM
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Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
and you're all of a sudden the expert on what can and cannot be done? Yes expression is a lot of the time inwardly focused, however, there is the internal expression that reaches out to the external and that my friend is where my general advice comes in.
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May 11 2005, 04:33 PM
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Another ditch in the road... you keep moving Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152 |
do you write peotry, out of interest?
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May 13 2005, 02:04 AM
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 cacaboii. [SAN FRAN is where... Group: Member Posts: 566 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,562 |
some how i get it.. it sad..
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May 13 2005, 03:36 PM
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Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
i write poetry out of many things.
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May 15 2005, 04:45 PM
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 Shutup before I smack you. Group: Member Posts: 119 Joined: May 2005 Member No: 136,015 |
oh wow. that was very good and very sad.
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