ah this is a little less gloomy than the other one, i just posted, to make me feel better |
 Apr 13 2005, 11:28 AM
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 Another ditch in the road... you keep moving  Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152  |
i could swim a rainbow
or surf the leaves as they fall from the trees or climb the fallout when the shit hit the fan a f**k in a bush does not a hardcore make id keep on for you sing the cliff face write the hills paint the skyline eat the world if you're on the other side the other side of 2D break the rapids tame the bronco if you wait for me to be right back that doesnt work for some reason... im not concentrating. meh |
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Apr 13 2005, 11:41 AM
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 weird Sarah. yes,me... Group: Member Posts: 714 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,023 |
keep going!
 does your poem have some background? |
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Apr 13 2005, 07:46 PM
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QUOTE a f**k in a bush does not a hardcore make That was my favorite line. Fcuking brilliant man. |
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Apr 13 2005, 09:00 PM
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Brie Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,172 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,548 |
QUOTE i could swim a rainbow or surf the leaves as they fall from the trees or climb the fallout when the shit hit the fan a f**k in a bush does not a hardcore make id keep on for you Ooh, I loved that part. Nice work, James.  Very descriptive once again. Lovely work.  I like the way you write. |
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Apr 14 2005, 12:14 PM
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Another ditch in the road... you keep moving Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152 |
thank you for the feedback!
i might re work the second half at some point.. i kinda lost my focus |
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Apr 14 2005, 03:19 PM
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 fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
QUOTE(MarchHare2UrAlice @ Apr 14 2005, 12:14 PM) thank you for the feedback! i might re work the second half at some point.. i kinda lost my focus  yeah, don't rush it. Come back to it and take your time... lord knows I do. I like it so far, for what it is. And: QUOTE i could swim a rainbow was GREAT. I think I just might quote you in my xanga. But I won't, if you don't want me to.
or surf the leaves as they fall from the trees or climb the fallout when the shit hit the fan a f**k in a bush does not a hardcore make id keep on for you |
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Apr 14 2005, 03:33 PM
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Another ditch in the road... you keep moving Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152 |
GO FOR IT!! woo i feel special
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