*winces*, i think i may have gone too emo here |
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 Apr 13 2005, 11:22 AM
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 Another ditch in the road... you keep moving  Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152  |
twist the loose tooth
snap a little bit of blood and a shiny quarter for mr pig turn the switch click a little bit of dark and then the light to know the way tune the radio fizz and little bit of silence and then the new britney and the blood and the dark and the silence go away out to play in the back of your mind where you put the mean words bully boy brown with a chest of toys hacksaw, bitch what happened to the quarter and the light and to britney? they go to ice cream and to your bedroom and to hell but the blood and the dark and the silence... hover and there's a chasm full of blood and dark and silence and the hacksaw, bitch the toychest is full of hand made crafts come out to play? |
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| *mishyerr* |
Apr 13 2005, 04:33 PM
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I love it and all the pain it gives. It gives me excitement.
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Apr 13 2005, 07:37 PM
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Such a detailed description of the experience. It's almost like I can feel it. Good job James! Write more!
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Apr 13 2005, 08:57 PM
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Brie Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,172 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,548 |
Ooh.
Awesome work, James.  Very descriptive. Lovely job. 
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Apr 14 2005, 12:14 PM
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Another ditch in the road... you keep moving Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152 |
thank you for the feedback!
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Apr 14 2005, 02:47 PM
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 fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
Hey. would you like to know just how much of a dorky white girl I am?
As I was reading what you called too emo, I was rapping it; It sucked. My rapping, not your writing. See, there. It's okay to go over the top with your feelings when you write. It's like opening the window a litle bit more. I love your writing. But I shouldn't have to tell you that every time I read something you write, you should know. I'm saying this for future reference. I liked the mysterious rhythm it had... Inconsistant in pattern, but at the same time, like diagnosing a wound in a method. I sound like an idiot in my reply, I know, but if only I could find the right "write" words I could make it easier to understand what I'm saying. Oh well. I guess "I like it" will just have to do. |
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