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I'm not sure what this is; poem, monologue, etcetera and I can't think of a title or anything for it (maybe it doesn't need one..?) But yeah, just something I wrote up during biology class. Please give me criticism, comments, feedback, and such. Thanks in advance =]
She tries to walk nonchalantly as he comes toward her. Her heart feels as if it’s pounding against her ribs, getting faster and faster with each step. She feels almost sick to her stomach as the space between them shortens. Maybe it’s not really a sickness but this sensation that’s so powerful that it’s overwhelming. All these thoughts intrude her mind…she wonders if this time he’ll stop to speak with her. If this time he’ll glance in her direction. If today will finally be the day he’ll take notice. The moments before their possible confrontation it gets harder to breathe. Her heart is furiously pounding. Now the thoughts are screaming…”Talk to me! Look at me! Anything…” The climax is reached. He’s not even an arms length away. She can smell his sweet cologne. The screaming stops. Everything is silent except for the beating of her heart. She lingers for a moment giving that extra chance for something to happen. But he passes by. Again, without even looking in her direction. Again, without saying a word. And again, she’s left crushed. |
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