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 Mar 20 2005, 11:48 AM
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 Another ditch in the road... you keep moving  Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152  |
the leaves of the trees
glimmer for you for me for us the waves of the sea crash for you for me for us the light of the fire flikkers for you for me for us. the wings of the angels beat for you for me for us and i see imperfection and i couldnt change a thing and i hear sweet discord and i wouldnt write a melody and i feel chaos and i never want the calm |
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Mar 22 2005, 12:31 AM
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wow. ur so poetic. i bet whoever you wrote it about is a lucky girl
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Mar 22 2005, 12:12 PM
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Another ditch in the road... you keep moving Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152 |
^^
eh, its not written for anyone in particular, im all alone *sniffles* |
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Mar 22 2005, 12:39 PM
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dude, you should like TOTALLY turn that into a rap song
you could make millions man... 
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Mar 22 2005, 06:03 PM
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 my <3 is in Ohio Group: Member Posts: 899 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,599 |
that's really good! very prettyful
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Mar 22 2005, 06:55 PM
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 This bitch better work! Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 13,681 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 28,095 |
QUOTE(MarchHare2UrAlice @ Mar 22 2005, 11:12 AM) im all alone *sniffles*  there, there. good poem james!  it seems like something out of my english book! 
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Mar 25 2005, 12:44 AM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
Good job james :) Very unique, you always start off your poems in a way that kinda draws you in. I thought it was great =) Keep it up
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Mar 25 2005, 03:12 PM
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I love the whole poem...it's beautiful..I like how it flows w/ the whole for you for me for us..I like how you got your message across...
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Mar 25 2005, 09:37 PM
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i like the ending.
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Mar 25 2005, 09:46 PM
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 I'll never be who I was again.. Group: Member Posts: 2,886 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 77,981 |
nice poem!good job..
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Mar 25 2005, 09:47 PM
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 I'd rather make mistakes than break. Group: Member Posts: 121 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 117,869 |
Wow, that was really deep. I liked it a lot, especially the ending.
"and i see imperfection and i couldnt change a thing and i hear sweet discord and i wouldnt write a melody" That, to me, was the best part of it. There was a slight rhyme, and it has its own underlying meaning. |
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Mar 25 2005, 09:48 PM
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wow, i like it :]
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Mar 25 2005, 10:04 PM
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NICE POEM!
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Mar 25 2005, 10:06 PM
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 highfive. Group: Member Posts: 1,301 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 32,951 |
I like it !
Very nice.
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Mar 27 2005, 10:07 PM
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 i've never wanted anything rationale. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,449 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,045 |
i like the end =) pretty james
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Mar 27 2005, 11:17 PM
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i quite like the end too...very nicely done as usual.
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Mar 28 2005, 12:40 AM
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 sorry. i drowned your fish. Group: Member Posts: 1,485 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 98,683 |
nice pattern :] it`s very nice.
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