can someone rate my freestyle too? Options

[william]

i don't know a lot about rap, but jason, your "freestyles" don't seem to have any kind of flow. the amount of syllables in each line seem to be completely different and follow no pattern whatsoever. a lot of the lines don't rhyme or make sense. you don't stick to one theme... it's pretty random. all of these things become glaringly apparent in the last eight lines of the most recent one you posted. work on that stuff.

[*nightmare4taki*]

Besides as a mc im the meanest/
Your the only one getting stuck up the ass by Michael Jackson's penis/

[Nugget]

Yo taki shut the f**k up man or ill knife ya
Your annihilation is set for sure, no fighting
Youll be deaded beheaded for biting, thats a violation of necro law
Dont look at me leeay, I really take that severely
You really think you wont end up like jeff healy, barely
Able to see me when youre near me, jooks for dirty looks
Me being shook of a wanna be crook? spare me
I got some serious faults, enslaving women in mysterious vaults
Craving sadistic assaults, bathing your slit wrist in salt
Shove an ice pick in your balls, youll seizure like a fiend
Going through sickness withdrawls
You diss, you realize you made a mistake,Im like a razor blade in a cake
Like being sprayed with raid in the face, while this beat is being played
Till you bleed with an ear ache, you afraid, walking through the gay parade
Your a loser and I mean it, no one likes u
The only person that likes u is michael jackson
cuz last time i was walkin in the streets, i saw u with a rubber penis
shut up and turn off your rap shit
they dont mean nothing but bullshit
if you want some come get some
cuz ur messin with the best, and getting dissed like the rest
i hope u dont get pissed  and get a physical stress
OHHH u bitch

HAHAH yo man thats funny..razorblade in a cake//till u bleed wit an ear ache..WTF!!?!? ROFL yo man ur such a loserr..that was thee GAYEST VERSE i have ever EVER heard..and u aint the best WTF ur messin wit my head.. haha i like him the truth is NO ONE LIKES U..wtf wit micheal jackson!? geezz..u make no sense..to mee


nightmare got it all right..hes the one..u cant take him..heh i actually understand him more thne u man..jsut please GIVE IT UP

Because impossible is nothing man. You dont know what'll happen unless u believe in ur self in rappin..rappin is my thing..for life yo i try hard

heh rappin is UR thing?? noo no its not..

[azn_r4pf4n]

Besides as a mc im the meanest/
Your the only one getting stuck up the ass by Michael Jackson's penis/

he owned jason right there.

**edit**

im not gonna battle anybody, but im just gonna type stuff down for the heck of it.

reminice \\
in the midst \\
i can think of a resume \\
quality of the afraid \\
so overplayed \\
but the poetry in the midst \\
poetry not stiff \\
ever since \\
the beginning of time \\
arrogance \\
inherited \\
it's just like a lost heretic \\

something about poetry. i got bored. don't ask.

[azn_r4pf4n]

*whoops double post*

[Nugget]

hehe u funny ^^^ god ppls are bringing up micheal jackson..

sniff he was ACCUSED alright?! doesnt mean the man molested children GOD..

but yea i still say nightmare is awesoem

jason please sit down

[*nightmare4taki*]

somone should poll to see if they think he is guilty inocent or not sure lol

[azn_r4pf4n]

somone should poll to see if they think he is guilty inocent or not sure lol

what do u mean by that?

[*Statistik*]

Yoyoyo taki
your name is taki cuz all u do is rap in chinese
i cant understand you
Your rhymes arent even worth a dime
I'm a true artist and this kid dosent even have a recording label
let me tell you this son
If you can beat me in this rap game
you can be on fear factor kissin my feet wit cheese on it
my beats are neat and there's no doubt about it
everyone respects me cuz i rap with honor
you just spit out shit to make fans make fun of u
i own the streets baby and will i be the next rap legend? maybe.
here's a treat for you son
I'll rip you off,
leave you in the desert 'til the voltures strip your corpse,
then rape your f**kin' wife, until my d**k is soft
'til the flesh is pealin' off,
I'm a devil consealed in cloth,
walk, walk or get stabbed with a fork,
you got a hole in your stomach,
yo plug it up with a cork, you dork,
lots of blood loss, red cross,
couldn't help your dead boss cut his head off,
brutal, sadistic, the only way,
I'll be remembered, after I'm dismemebered,
and my bones decay, a rap legend,
to the aggressionary session
when you hear my sh!t your ear drums dont quit
put the split in your wig and expose you bald ass
drop you in the ocean and raise up the tide
and thats all folks the end of you comes quick
like your relationships with d**k
trying to play it off but inside you wanna die
trying to impress your whole life and livin a lie
ur rap aint makin any differences
cuz everyday you have no life writin down lyrics on a piece of paper
hey son, i got stuff to do instead readin your whick wack ignorant lyrics
why dont u juss drop and stop
i betcha you'll make another rap just to get revenge
dont try avenge my rap
cuz i dont want any of yo bullshit

HAHAHAH

[azn_r4pf4n]

quotes:

my beats are neat and there's no doubt about it
everyone respects me cuz i rap with honor

where are ur beats?


ur rapping, but this isn't honor.

everybody respects u? everybody has different opinions, how can everybody respect a certain person?

[*nightmare4taki*]

Man i really dont have the time or the paitence/
Especially for a kid thats really below low maintence/
You dont freestyle we all know itsl rehearsal/
I put you in a chokehold reversal/
Jason your flow is killing me and you know you feeling me/
You beating me, nahhh not likely/
Your style is not original nor is it pure/
Why am i battling such an amateur
All sh*t look what i have done and did/
I feel bad finishing the career of a kid/
Jada ripped 50 now im going to rip you but hopefully you want get hurt or shot/
Im about to turn this into ripley's believe it or not/
Im so harmonious and sincere with it when i spit it/
And speak a different language so these haters dont get it/
Encrypted like a computer program stored in the ram/
Process raps like a pentium when i make my stand/
Jason this is madness please stop this/
You beating me is just LUDACRIS/
We can go back and forth but you will never out last me/
If u had a gun you wouldn't even have the nerve enough to blast me/
Ok lets analyze the situation and be realistic/
Your flow isn't average while mine is ballistic/
when are you going to learn/
you f*ck with fire your gonna burn/
Oh yeah and dont go the the clubs i go to and try to get crunk/
Because if you roll without a crew your ass will get jumped/

[jbjennessee13]

shut the f**k up and never rap again please

HAHA....yeah I'm with that kid ^^

[Nugget]

Yoyoyo taki
your name is taki cuz all u do is rap in chinese
i cant understand you
Your rhymes arent even  worth a dime
I'm a true artist and this kid dosent even have a recording label
let me tell you this son
If you can beat me in this rap game
you can be on fear factor kissin my feet wit cheese on it
my beats are neat and there's no doubt about it
everyone respects me cuz i rap with honor
you just spit out shit to make fans make fun of u
i own the streets baby and will i be the next rap legend? maybe.
here's a treat for you son
I'll rip you off,
leave you in the desert 'til the voltures strip your corpse,
then rape your f**kin' wife, until my d**k is soft
'til the flesh is pealin' off,
I'm a devil consealed in cloth,
walk, walk or get stabbed with a fork,
you got a hole in your stomach,
yo plug it up with a cork, you dork,
lots of blood loss, red cross,
couldn't help your dead boss cut his head off,
brutal, sadistic, the only way,
I'll be remembered, after I'm dismemebered,
and my bones decay, a rap legend,
to the aggressionary session
when you hear my sh!t your ear drums dont quit
put the split in your wig and expose you bald ass
drop you in the ocean and raise up the tide
and thats all folks the end of you comes quick
like your relationships with d**k
trying to play it off but inside you wanna die
trying to impress your whole life and livin a lie
ur rap aint makin any differences
cuz everyday you have no life writin down lyrics on a piece of paper
hey son, i got stuff to do instead readin your whick wack ignorant lyrics
why dont u juss drop and stop
i betcha you'll make another rap just to get revenge
dont try avenge my rap
cuz i dont want any of yo bullshit

HAHAHAH

wow ummm please just stop..wtf he doesnt rap in chinese..ehe i UNDERSTAND IT..its u taht i dont understand..and besides look at jin..beat some guy rappin chinese..and fear factor cheese?? wtf gay..u dont even have a record label..so dont talk..u aint gona be a rap legend..U CANT RAP..and wtf plug it up wit a cork u dork?? honey please..heck yea ull be remembered wit the worst rap..and writing down lyrics on a piece of paper mean they have no life??WTF..he just "AVENGE" ur rap like how many times?? this kid..jason..please..u get out of the rap life and do something else..i swear u think its the best and yet its not..just let it go kid..u make no sense in ur rap..god please just stop it.. ur rap akes me sick..cant take enough.u think of the stupidest things..like a blade of a cake..and kissin ya feet on fear factor wit cheese? gay enough said

edit

he just read nightmares lyrics and he outplayed u again

[*nightmare4taki*]

Yo Jason I really love this line. You finsished yourself off. LOL.

I'll be remembered, after I'm dismemebered

[jnukes]

^owned. by irony

taki > jason , i say .

no,

taki >>>>>>>>>>>>. jason

i'd type up somethin now and diss jason .. but .. nah .. dont wanna .. he's embarassed enough as it is =P ..

[*Statistik*]

yo taki
Watch this, when I shine I bring rain
Clouds, bust storms, yo, this ain't the norm
When I perform, I get you up out your seat
Get down with the real deal skills, then chill
Then show your ass how to get amped, then lamp
Stretch, flex, then tackle what's next
Cause MC's, that luck up, need to hush up
who can't brush up, on their rap style, shut the f**k up
Then duck from the one that gets buck-wild
I chop your ass in half, with a smile
Big grin, all teeth, for those who got beef
f**kin with me ock, you're six feet deep
Down in the ground, alone with no sound
while I'm up here CHILLIN, top billin
And illin, on all those, who oppose
I wanna take one more shot, strike a pose, uhh!
i came here to play wit no foo
im rappin just to make u say "who?"
my rhymes are true and yours is screwed as hell
and i bet you havent noticed and you already knew
you think ur so gangsta u dont even dress like a gangsta
last time i saw u were wearing a gap sweater and old navy jeans
im so popular my videos were played in da big screens
ur a loser and ur nothing to hip-hop
im gon reach the next level from this to top

The next 50-ja beef: Jason vs Taki

[azn_r4pf4n]

LOLOLOL!!! i cant believe he called this the next 50-ja beef.

[*wind&fire*]

i love his thread *hug*

[azn_r4pf4n]

i love his thread *hug*

ya me 2, it cracks me up.

[*wind&fire*]

you think ur so gangsta u dont even dress like a gangsta
last time i saw u were wearing a gap sweater and old navy jeans

you dont even look like a ganster

im so popular my videos were played in da big screens

i dont think you have music vidoes out... im startin to think plaigarism

[HongKongDong]

The next 50-ja beef: Jason vs Taki

That "beef" isn't even anything. Ja' must be one of the most poorest excuse for a rapper out there. IMO he is better then 50 though, but when it comes to freestylin' and battling 50 just takes Ja' out.

i love his thread *hug*

Hahhahahah... LOL... me too

[*nightmare4taki*]

Jason you must be a real dumazz/
Your making me look like nastradamus/
This is something that is essential/
If you get a record deal then everyon has potential/
Your not human so you must be inorganic/
Ill sink your azz faster than the titanic/
U talk like a thug but when the drama unfolds your the first to pass out/
Thx for giving me this opportunity to air you ass out/
And I must say I have yo admit you really are the best/
When it come to f*cking up like ron artest/
I wonder if 50 knows a wanksta like you listens to his music/
He probaly doesn't because he is just to reclusive/
Quit swallowing the peel and sipping the bottle/
Cuz the truth is none of us will ever date a model/
Im the truth i touch you you start aching/
We all know your gay so stop faking like CLay Aiken/
Nope Im not chinese but i will kick your azz like rush hour/
And throw you over a great wall of china guard tower/
All hail to jason the one who got murked/
I just really hope that the truth doesn't hurt/

[azn_r4pf4n]

Im the truth i touch you you start aching/
We all know your gay so stop faking like CLay Aiken/

lolz, pwned jason. clay aiken. haha

[*wind&fire*]

Clay aiken is a faker?

[*nightmare4taki*]

Jason I will show you friday the 13th