A Poem about the War, We don't realize how lucky we are Options

[xXMomoBubbleTeaX...]

I made it up...soOo please juss give me an honest opinion about you think about it...thanx CB members..and I accidentally put it in the wrong forum sOo please don't get mad...


You don't understand the pain I feel inside
My parents ran away and I don't know why
They tell me it's important and promise to come back
And then they head to their room and they start to pack
Now a days in my dreams I can hear my Mom's voice
I wish I had a say in this war, but I don't get that choice
Remembering the days I spent w/ my Dad
He may have embarassed me at times, but it wasn't that bad
The days since they left go by pretty fast
But all of a sudden a year has past
Why is it my family that has to be torn apart?
They tell me in the letters they keep me close to their hearts
The war is almost over and they'll be home soon
When there car pulls through the drive-way I'll be ready w/ balloons
Today is the day they are coming home
So much to tell them so much they don't know
But the sun starts to fall and there still not here
My face gets red and my eyes fill w/ tears
All of a sudden a man in uniform appears in my yard
He says he has something to tell me and it might be hard
My heart fills w/ dread w/ those words he said
No child should be told that their parents are dead
I start to yell, scream, and cry
He tells me to settle down, but why should I?
There's so much more of me they haven't seen
I still have my whole life yet I'm only thirteen
They promised they'd come back they promised to me
He tells me they died in honor of defending our country
He told me they would be proud of what a lady I've become
I tell him I don't care and that this war was dumb
He tells me he has to go and more families to disappoint
Years go by now and I got that mans point
I still wish I could see my parents one last time
But they know how I'm doing I'm doing just fine

[rOckThISshYt]

Umm... all I can say is.... wow.

That's an amazing piece. A lot of the time I don't like rhyming poems because the author sometimes focuses more on the rhyming than the actual emotion and poem. But... that didn't happen at all in your poem.

[swe3ttemptasian]

awww that's really good. Isn't this the one you showed me a while ago?or was it another one?