eternity, one of my few poems which sort of rhymes |
 Mar 9 2005, 12:33 PM
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 Another ditch in the road... you keep moving  Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152  |
fire burn
water bubble wind to freeze earth to rumble sing with me the song of souls for for us the bell dont toll watch the reaper come for others open the door of our brothers listen to the tinkling bells rotting in a private hell a killing thirst we cannot slate fire to ice and love to hate its sounded bouncy in my mind... its not my best i dont think |
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Mar 9 2005, 02:48 PM
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I like it..simple, yet so much meaning to it with all the nice words you used.
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Mar 9 2005, 09:01 PM
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^^
agreed. i like the concepts used of the elements and whatnot...nicely done james. |
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Mar 18 2005, 09:14 PM
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I like it cuz it's simple and short, it's not really like most poems and that's a good thing in this situation.
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