i need opinions, on something i wrote |
i need opinions, on something i wrote |
Mar 24 2005, 04:10 AM
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i wrote this, just now, kind of an explosions of feelings, let me know what you think
eating away from the inside my walls are being torn down a renivation of the soul painful scars revealed the front i put up daily now becoming transparent exposing the battle of who i should be who i professe to be what i want to be and who i am all in a condradiction to eachother a different story for each day a quick fix here and there a life fully of temporary happy soon overshadowed by lifes daily downfalls a fall of hope a fall of faith for i know where to grasp hold to save myself and soul but i dont hold on i let my self go falling into what appears to be another life how i act depending on the time or situation living to please, forgetting to please myself pulled from reality into what i would like to call my fantasy by the consequences are real and there is far worse to come unless i turn around which as easy as it seems come at a price far too high for me to bear so i stay stay in what some call hell, some call home facing each day a personal trial a lock on my emotional being my soul struggles to breath the fresh air of a free life of one i can shrug the shackles of the world ive created to which it can easily grasp but i wont let it so all thsi saying ive given birth to my destiny but the truth calls clearly the last question left upond my weary mind a far from my dieing inspiration do i answer it? |
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derek_drums i need opinions Mar 24 2005, 04:10 AM
lolita kitty hm, this should be moved to writing ^.^
can't ... Mar 24 2005, 04:37 AM
niez_cho The 2nd last line... you spelled dying wrong.
This... Mar 24 2005, 04:40 AM
racoons > you ^^
this needs to be moved to writing, folks there... Mar 24 2005, 08:24 AM
Shattered_Hope you need to fix a few of your typos..but other tha... Mar 24 2005, 11:18 AM
ohh_so_elektrikk<3 yea you should move this to writing. i dont really... Mar 24 2005, 11:58 AM
racoons > you This has been reposted in 'writing'
pleas... Mar 24 2005, 12:05 PM
xXMomoBubbleTeaXx falling into what appears to be another life
how i... Mar 25 2005, 03:17 PM
RiddleMeWonders I like the way you wrote this...
The message is on... Mar 25 2005, 04:45 PM![]() ![]() |