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suicide, tell me wat u think!!
the...bob
post Oct 22 2004, 01:16 AM
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ok im not depressed or nething but i was really mad wen i wrote this ok:

suicide:

i cannot live
i cannot die
i cannot cease the flow of time
so i pass,
from one plane to another
its not your fault,
dear mother and father
i leave you now
with this note of despair
i feel it now
the hands of death
always and forever,cold and bare
so now i lie
at the foot of my bed,
the blood flowing freely
from
my
head

critisims is required!! i INSIST
 

Posts in this topic
the...bob   suicide   Oct 22 2004, 01:16 AM
jambaJUICE   sounds like teen angst. Lol. Its not bad, but its...   Oct 23 2004, 02:43 AM
interwoven.reality   don't commit suicide   Oct 23 2004, 02:53 AM
the...bob   haahaa! ok im NOT gunna commit suicide, i just...   Oct 23 2004, 11:20 AM
Cloud_X   It's odd...I will say that. This is what I thi...   Oct 24 2004, 12:28 AM
goofipinay   its pretty good, i think   Oct 24 2004, 09:17 AM
Weird addiction   that's nice   Oct 24 2004, 10:01 AM


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