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 Jan 19 2005, 06:48 PM
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 Canadian Boyfriend, I think it's time  Group: Member Posts: 450 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 40,705  |
Who are you to judge me from my artificial self
You don't even know half of the story of my life And you don't understand what it's like to wake everyday With nothing to hope for;nothing joyous in this lifetime Only an imitation of the true person in the core of my disguise My depression is asscending further than ever Preforming for this crowd of critics;I am a puppet on a string It's so difficult to make it through And I'm not quite sure what to do But I know for a supported fact that I am ugly inside like you The souveniers of this long journey are the Scars on my wrist and a black hole for a heart All I want in the end is victory of our never-ending war But this disease I have is excessive And I will be defeated...alone My depression is asscending further than ever Preforming for this crowd of critics;I am a puppet on a string. It's so difficult to make it through And I'm not quite sure what to do But I know for a supported fact that I am ugly inside like you As my last thoughts and words linger in my mind As I confide these unknown secrets with pen and paper As this competition has finally died down As I lie here motionless in a body whose soul was rejected And heart broken. |
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Jan 22 2005, 06:03 PM
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Canadian Boyfriend, I think it's time Group: Member Posts: 450 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 40,705 |
QUOTE(KissMe2408 @ Jan 22 2005, 5:10 PM) wow....i felt this way about a year ago. You really know how to capture emotions and write them down. wonderful job! This could def be a song...if you know how to write music then i suggest you writing some to accompany this! keep it up!  Thanks. ^^ I guess this is one of the only ways I know how to express myself. QUOTE(Gypsy Eyes @ Jan 22 2005, 5:20 PM) very well written. Descriptive with great imagery. i feel like I can relate It's nice to know someone else feels like I do. QUOTE(ermfermoo @ Jan 22 2005, 5:24 PM) Wow... that was amazing. Finally, a poem that tells the reality of it all. Well there might be more but i haven't found them yet. Great job on the poem. Awesome job on the poem. I suggest you copywrite it. Lol  I think THAT is the best compliment I have ever recieved for..well...anything! Haha. Thanks a lot! You guys are the ones that keep my writing. I appreciate it all. ^^ |
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Jan 24 2005, 03:12 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 2,746 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 17,125 |
QUOTE(TreesTurnMeOn @ Jan 22 2005, 6:03 PM) I think THAT is the best compliment I have ever recieved for..well...anything! Haha. Thanks a lot! Haha no problem!! 
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TreesTurnMeOn Like You Jan 19 2005, 06:48 PM
stephinika well done. i like the word choice and style. good ... Jan 20 2005, 01:34 AM
TreesTurnMeOn QUOTE(stephinika @ Jan 20 2005, 1:34 AM)well ... Jan 20 2005, 10:56 AM KissMe2408 wow....i felt this way about a year ago. You reall... Jan 22 2005, 05:10 PM Gypsy Eyes very well written. Descriptive with great imagery.... Jan 22 2005, 05:20 PM ermfermoo Wow... that was amazing. Finally, a poem that tell... Jan 22 2005, 05:24 PM ryfitaDF it's good, but i'm kind of confused. the f... Jan 22 2005, 06:56 PM TreesTurnMeOn QUOTE(ryfitaDF @ Jan 22 2005, 6:56 PM)it... Jan 22 2005, 07:04 PM |
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