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| *Kathleen* |
 Jan 15 2005, 10:50 PM
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Not my best, but hey...whatever. I still like to get criticism for my stuff.
 I actually had to write this for English...can you spot the allusion, connotation/denotation, repetition, and personification?  Oh - and what genre of war poetry do you think it is?Deprived ‘Twas just like every other morose, solemn morn Where the soldiers await an arbitrary end As the sounds of mechanic demons are born Onward he marches, in hopes he transcends ‘Twas just like every other time he stood ground Prepared to overcome his worst fears of loss Caught in a shower of fire, watching it come down Praying to God, he holds tight his dear cross ‘Twas just like every other time a soldier died Knowing there was no way out, he left Earth Consumed by the war, he dissolved without pride Taken by this conflict, he simply erased his birth |
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| *Kathleen* |
Jan 15 2005, 11:07 PM
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Hehe aww thanks! Even though...I kind of think the third stanza sucks a bit. Haha. What can I say...I wrote it in under ten minutes. It's only worth ten points.
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Kathleen Deprived Jan 15 2005, 10:50 PM
JlIaTMK Omg, how do you write so beautifully Kathlers. I m... Jan 15 2005, 10:55 PM sadolakced acid wonderful poem. Jan 15 2005, 11:03 PM yanners whoa kathleen, that's awesome. i suckwhen it ... Jan 15 2005, 11:51 PM Kathleen Thank you! Jan 16 2005, 02:32 PM MyVermilionPlague Ahhh!
I LOVE IT, Kathleen!
100% on word c... Jan 16 2005, 02:48 PM Kathleen Thanks, Brie! Jan 18 2005, 10:39 PM
stephinika well done. i like the word choice, like brie said ... Jan 20 2005, 09:17 PM |
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