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 Dec 18 2004, 11:33 PM
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 Canadian Boyfriend, I think it's time  Group: Member Posts: 450 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 40,705  |
Screaming in the hallways of my past
It's cadance beating like the sound of a drum Feelings I remorse over every waking moment Amazed by the love we once had Whipering in my ear are the words I once heard Fluttering is missing in my once whole heart Three words I once held so dearly Intrigued in the memories I had held so close... In the profound moments that we shared together I will never leave behind my intellections of us At one time when two hearts molded into one Beautifully transfixed into my own state of mind Still enveloped in a thing so intricate and fragile Pounding in it's cage but it just can't escape Retention lingers in my hollow and broken heart Insanely deep and dark;down I fall [If anyone could help me title this, it would be great] [[Oh yeah, please don't lie if you say it's good. I want to know what it's really like] |
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Jan 14 2005, 12:50 AM
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 dripping destruction Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 7,282 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 21,929 |
yea, longer would be nice so there would be more room to detail the emotions and all.
your siggy poem is cool too. |
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TreesTurnMeOn [Insert Title Here] Dec 18 2004, 11:33 PM
xSWEETxCANDiix that's amazing, honestly, it's so beatiful... Dec 20 2004, 06:44 AM Frankie very nice. i like the words in it. awesome! Dec 20 2004, 10:58 AM sikdragon truthfully it left me wanting. It's a good beg... Dec 21 2004, 03:54 AM angel-roh i cant think of a title either but this will be a ... Dec 22 2004, 11:54 PM MyVermilionPlague Egh. I suck at titles..
Anyway, that's really... Dec 24 2004, 02:48 AM baller30 some of the best poems don't have titles
it... Dec 25 2004, 12:13 AM yoshiyoshi you're a strong writer, the phrases in the poe... Dec 25 2004, 04:00 PM electric shock You have a mind of writing. Dec 25 2004, 04:30 PM ryfitaDF it's tooooo short. you can fit so much more wi... Jan 8 2005, 08:55 PM TreesTurnMeOn Thanks everyone. ^^ I'll make it longer and re... Jan 9 2005, 12:59 PM im2tall Nice... I think you could definately add to this, ... Jan 14 2005, 09:53 PM
yanners i really like it. it moved me. Jan 15 2005, 10:11 AM |
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