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 Nov 30 2004, 01:22 AM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer*  Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134  |
as it rains down upon my soul
i tend to lose everything....im out of control my dreams start to slowly fade away again and again day by day.... would you fight for me right by my side... knowing everything we once knew has died. nothing hurts more than love it self... a powerful feeling that cant compare to nothing else i gave up .. what else is there to do when the most thing you want..doesnt want you.. |
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Dec 21 2004, 03:43 AM
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 Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
well did you intend for there to be a double negative?
"The thing you most want" I mean if you look at it it says im sad hold me. when you could've said so much more. from 1-10 i give it a 4 |
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dispn0ygonekrazy hmm Nov 30 2004, 01:22 AM
angel-roh aww so you're asking for your lover to help yo... Dec 15 2004, 02:33 PM rainnydaiis Hmm well alwayz writing about love =P keep up the ... Dec 16 2004, 08:43 PM dispn0ygonekrazy lol hey thats what im best at and i dont wanna let... Dec 16 2004, 09:03 PM angel-roh that's good that you have that kind of skills.... Dec 18 2004, 12:26 PM smthngcrprategrl34 it's good i like it Dec 18 2004, 07:47 PM xSWEETxCANDiix i love it! it's so deep geat job Dec 20 2004, 06:46 AM Frankie i like it. very random!
and i love the rhyme... Dec 20 2004, 11:05 AM
T0rmented_Soul ^ I remember you, always criticised me on my poems... Sep 5 2006, 12:38 PM |
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