im not perfect...sorry, comment please |
 Dec 20 2004, 03:15 PM
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 my <3 is in Ohio  Group: Member Posts: 899 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,599  |
this is a poem i wrote last year and yeah i know it kinda sucks but tell me what you think anyways alright? leave suggestions to okay? help me make it better!
IM NOT PERFECT...SORRY nobody is perfect those are the words i recall you telling me now you torment me you take back all the good things you said the truths you once told are now lies i don'tknow why you'd do this to me but i guess there is never a reason you say now that i should be perfect or i will never be accepted well that's not what you told me then but i guess now is what really matters i stay for mom's sake mom told me what he did to you i will never do that to my children i promise you that i told you that then now it is now and you are dying mom made me visit you i will never forget what you did i hate you more then anything else but in the last minutes of your life i say... i'm sorry i wasn't perfect |
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Dec 21 2004, 03:12 AM
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 Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
isn't there a song about this that the radio stations won't stop playing? if you are serious about this poem you should probably rewrite it a few times to make it different from the one on the radio. from 1-10 i give it a 3.
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smthngcrprategrl34 im not perfect...sorry Dec 20 2004, 03:15 PM
smthngcrprategrl34 yeah i know what your talking about and i think i ... Dec 21 2004, 11:31 AM tyedyefroggy Ones on the radio? Ahh, Im soo confused LoL
NE wa... Dec 22 2004, 11:43 AM smthngcrprategrl34 thank you Dec 22 2004, 03:08 PM tungtwista mad props on the poem dude. has a good flow to it.... Dec 22 2004, 03:18 PM angel-roh umm yeah kinda weird........................ it... Dec 22 2004, 11:52 PM Frankie i got kinda confused in the middle. but good job. Dec 23 2004, 11:38 AM
smthngcrprategrl34 thank you for your comment Dec 23 2004, 11:57 AM |
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