Untitled poem I wrote, please comment |
 Nov 27 2004, 02:06 PM
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I try to tell you I am sorry
But you do not care I try to tell you that I am different Not really that way But you are too busy telling me What a horrible person I am You compare me to her As if that is possible And continue to tear me down Then the next minute You tell me you care for me So much, it's so real But then you swear, then you yell And I feel like I have finally seen hell You strangle me, you slit my throat With the words you use, to show how you hate me I am dying, you are killing me And I am pretty sure You don't even care This is to my ex-boyfriend. The "her" in this poem is my ex-best friend, who was the girl that he cheated on me, with. If that makes sense. So yeah leave comments please. Thanks. |
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Nov 27 2004, 02:45 PM
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Wow, i really really like that, partly because i can relate to it totally and partly because of how you've chosen ur words........im impressed
*thumbs up* 
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oO_BrItTiShBaBe_Oo Untitled poem I wrote Nov 27 2004, 02:06 PM
sweetxsimplicity I think it's good. =)
Maybe you should try rhy... Nov 27 2004, 02:29 PM
sikdragon Not to sound harsh, but try rewriting it a few mor... Nov 27 2004, 05:53 PM |
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