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whispers in a subway
dreamerOi
post Nov 5 2004, 01:29 AM
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aiko Nakamura at your service
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Didn't post in a long time so i decided to post. hahaa i finally had something to write about

I promise,
these legs are broken,
i won't walk away.

Yours words are fake,
so seal the lips tightly closed.
now i close my eyes,
hoping you won't see my lament
tightly hold the bloody heart,
minimizing the increasing beat
&slowly lay on the stone cold floor,
bringing my legs near.

You learned so much,
from that peek i let out.
Now i see your eyes weeped,
that day ago.
feeling sorry i look into you,
only to see the mockery.
&now the voices we heard
become whispers in a subway.
 
 
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post Nov 13 2004, 03:27 AM
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hello : )
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QUOTE(dreamerOi @ Nov 7 2004, 10:15 PM)
haa. well at first im quoting what this guy said. he'll never leave &wont be like all the other people in my life and just walk away. so then im all. everything he says is a lie &that i close my eyes so he wont see that truly im actually sad and crying. then my heart begins to ache so i start to clench on it and lay down. &then i let out a blink that shows all my emotions so its saying that he saw my pain. then he faked these tears he let out to mock me &then we both slowly fade from each others memories.

after reading the meaning, it makes much more sense and it is really good. i had to reread it like 5 times lol because i was trying to find a meaning by myself. but yeah, good job!
 

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