whispers in a subway |
whispers in a subway |
Nov 5 2004, 01:29 AM
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![]() aiko Nakamura at your service ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 1,518 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,144 |
Didn't post in a long time so i decided to post. hahaa i finally had something to write about
I promise, these legs are broken, i won't walk away. Yours words are fake, so seal the lips tightly closed. now i close my eyes, hoping you won't see my lament tightly hold the bloody heart, minimizing the increasing beat &slowly lay on the stone cold floor, bringing my legs near. You learned so much, from that peek i let out. Now i see your eyes weeped, that day ago. feeling sorry i look into you, only to see the mockery. &now the voices we heard become whispers in a subway. |
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Nov 13 2004, 03:27 AM
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![]() hello : ) ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 4,227 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 13,139 |
QUOTE(dreamerOi @ Nov 7 2004, 10:15 PM) haa. well at first im quoting what this guy said. he'll never leave &wont be like all the other people in my life and just walk away. so then im all. everything he says is a lie &that i close my eyes so he wont see that truly im actually sad and crying. then my heart begins to ache so i start to clench on it and lay down. &then i let out a blink that shows all my emotions so its saying that he saw my pain. then he faked these tears he let out to mock me &then we both slowly fade from each others memories. after reading the meaning, it makes much more sense and it is really good. i had to reread it like 5 times lol because i was trying to find a meaning by myself. but yeah, good job! |
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dreamerOi whispers in a subway Nov 5 2004, 01:29 AM
Weird addiction ooh its soooo good,ur realli good!!*recite... Nov 5 2004, 11:19 AM
dreamerOi haha thank you. Nov 5 2004, 03:39 PM
EvraeMorbid Very Pretty. Nov 5 2004, 11:30 PM
MasteRxKiD It's one of those poems that are hard to decip... Nov 6 2004, 03:20 AM
PinkTrash yeah, love the ending. <3 Nov 7 2004, 12:45 AM
RiddleMeWonders Despite what you said, I think you did a pretty go... Nov 7 2004, 02:00 AM
dreamerOi thanks a bunch but what happnd to insults . haha... Nov 7 2004, 10:02 PM
Cloud_X Wow...so mysterious...I still don't get the me... Nov 7 2004, 11:55 PM
dreamerOi QUOTE(Cloud_X @ Nov 7 2004, 9:55 PM)Wow...so ... Nov 8 2004, 12:15 AM
Cloud_X Oh ok. That makes it easier. I must've reread ... Nov 8 2004, 12:18 AM
dreamerOi haha thanks. what hapnd to all your poems? you hav... Nov 8 2004, 12:19 AM
Cloud_X Oh yeah I'm writing one right now. I'm gon... Nov 8 2004, 12:21 AM
dreamerOi haha awesome. ill be sure to check it out. Nov 8 2004, 12:25 AM
jambaJUICE QUOTE(MasteRxKiD @ Nov 6 2004, 3:20 AM)It... Nov 8 2004, 12:55 AM
dreamerOi thank you im glad you enjoyed it. Nov 8 2004, 02:58 AM
Rachel is love i reallllly like it. its very.....personal feeling... Nov 16 2004, 09:41 PM![]() ![]() |