A tornado of hurt Options

[melface]

Hey guys, It's Joe (MasteRxKiD). Mel went off to go get something to eat, and she told me to post this up for her. I didn't know what to title the topic, so I just picked a line that I enjoyed the most. Personally, I like it.
Mel takes this part inside her and creates an interesting and mysterious character for her stories. Whether it be a bad mood one day, conflict inside or self-doubt, she takes those emotions and forms a new personality. At least, that's what I've seen so far. Comments greatly appreciated!

-Joe
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The growing pain was alive inside of her… she could feel a tornado of hurt building up… flooding her veins; a rush. Her chest collapsed and then she breathed it all in. Her hands trembled as her knees were debilitating. She was lost within her mind… trying to search for an answer to everything that was taking place around her…She leaned against the wall and let her knees bend forward as her back slid down the mustard yellow stucco wall, scratching her back in torture.

Yet, mind over body, and right now physical pain was far from this world. She could slit herself the deepest cut and still she wouldn't feel a thing as the blood would slowly run out of her wound and spread ever so carefully around her fragile frame, her eyes will still remain stuck in confusion.

She rested her head on her knees, letting her long brown hair cascade forward and hide her from anyone who might see her in this unstable state. And right then, nothing in the world mattered to her anymore… She poured herself out… onto the cement around her.

[x emo screamo x]

I love your writing style.

The way you worded it was awesome...

I wish I could write like you