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 Oct 8 2004, 06:37 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer*  Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134  |
no one else can compare this world to you
you were my only friend, my only love but its all gone now since you moved away my heart feeling broken and torn apart i wont give up and fall on my knees im going to try my hardest and fulfill my dream to make you happy and put that smile on your face the look that started it all before you left without a trace its been so long now ive forgotten about you every moment that we had ive thrown away i gave up that day when you found someone new when he said those words i promised to say to you...... hmm i havent wrote a love poem in awhile hope yall likes |
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Oct 9 2004, 11:57 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Yeah, I agree with what Mel says...
But, I really like the middle stanza... Nice rhythm and it's goes together pretty nicely. |
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dispn0ygonekrazy no one else Oct 8 2004, 06:37 PM
fairy_princess aww tis good, i like a lot Oct 9 2004, 05:05 PM omg_melface It's nice!... but somehow it doesn't F... Oct 9 2004, 06:56 PM lucky_clover aww!! that is a sweet and cute poem. Oct 9 2004, 07:15 PM
dispn0ygonekrazy heheh thnx everyone yeah i know about the middle a... Oct 11 2004, 05:54 PM |
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