Darkness Options

[rainnydaiis]

Heres something I wrote but its sort of weird so bare with me. Enjoy ! =P

Laid before me was an obstacle no man would ever want to take. Walking through a never ending tunnel of darkness. Not knowing what lays ahead was what scared me. As soon as I walked in I felt the dark piercing my heart over and over just bring pain. As I walked deeper I heard the dark trying to speak fear into me. Showing me no mercy and no end I kept wandering for hours and hours just awaiting what was next with fear. I stalled in fear for I heard noises that were coming from all directions getting closer and closer. Staying still was the only choice that my mind couldnt contiplate. I felt the darkness going past me one by one just giving me more pain and fear as they passed by. I ran for fear they would come back and do the same. Running and running never knowing when this would end. Just searching for the place where there is no fear, no pain, and a place where only peace dwells.

[Heathasm]

this is an interesting piece, its almost like being sucked into a tunnel while reading it you reapeat yourself a little too much, though, and takes away from the full effect