Hating Myself For You Options

[SarahxJoy]

Hating Myself For You
I'm sorry for being there
I'm sorry for being me
I'm sorry for hating myself
And I'm sorry that there are no words to speak

I'm sorry for your hurt
As I drown within my own
I know that I can't change this
Because all of it, I have thrown

I know I was never good enough
And I don't know why you let me stick around
I don't know what I'm supposed to think
And I don't know what I should do for now

I wish you were here
But I know that you can't be
Because you're off with her
But I just can't let it go, can't you see?

I know that things'll never be the same
Never the same between us
But I just wanted you to know
That in all of it, there was love
Not just lust

Hopefully, within these twisted reveries
You'll finally be able to realize that everything I said was true
And I just wanted you to know
That I'm hating myself, because of you


Hm, and there you have it. Surprisingly, I've just finished this poem, in less than five minutes. Nice to see that I'm immune to writer's block again. Comments are greatly appreciated.

Edit:\\ Aww. No comments. We seriously need to get this writing section more noticeable.

[NatiMarie]

Wow.

I like the message. Very good.

Things to keep in mind...

Structure of a poem is important. Poetry is its own language. There are certain ways to compile it all. Problem is finding a way to compile it in a way that it makes it most melodic when read aloud.

The beginning you start off with 'I'm sorry...'
It's consistant within the first couple of lines. Later on you change format and start off with random words...kind of bringing down the overal smooth flow from the poem.

One thing I'm very fond of is the closing statement you used. Very powerful indeed.

Hopefully, within these twisted reveries
You'll finally be able to realize that everything I said was true
And I just wanted you to know
That I'm hating myself, because of you

I love the last line. It captured my attention and that's what it needed to be. Awesome job there.

=]