im depressed Options

[dispn0ygonekrazy]

i wrote this for my ex right now i dont give a care about any writing guidelines critisism say whatever u want i rhymed this one iight

no matter how hard i tried to get u back
i gotta give it up and get back on track
the times with you id never forget
every last moment that id never regret
only that time when everything fell
where it went in chaos and sent us through hell
just a phone call away i heard ur voice
i choked up on my words and i didnt have a choice
i was so scared i couldnt say sorry to you
out of so many chances it didnt go through
the songs u played while we were on the phone
i cried so hard and realized that im on my own
now im gonna go away and out of your sight
so it can go back to the way when everything was right
im sorry i couldnt say these simple words to you
but only to hope that youd keep your head up and make it through

im like going goodbye here yall im like so f*cked up right now

[melface]

You're so emo...

why are you going to kill yourself over a girl... let me ask you some questions:
How old are you?
Is she the same age as you?
How long were you together?
Was it some stupid teenage puppy love?

Your poem wasn't bad and it actually made sense... I actually think if you weren't busy thinking about rhyming then maybe you could have expressed yourself even BETTER! you should try it some time... just let the words come out don't think about what you said previously.... As for the rhyming thing.... if you're going to rhyme then go into rapping or hip hop.

And for the 'oh i'm leaving cB thing...' I have something to say to that:
why?
why leave just because some stupid girl left you and because you're depressed?
i don't think you have a clue of how it is to be depressed...
you're probably not going to commit suicide because you would've done it by now.
if you DO leave... DO NOT.... DO NOT.... DO NOT! make one of those stupid 'goodbye cb' sh*ts in the lounge... GOD ANYTHING BUT THAT.... but if you feel as if you need to say something then... write a poem and ehh underneath be like "okay i'm leaving cb now kthxbye"