a depressing poem |
 Sep 24 2004, 08:36 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer*  Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134  |
we both stare at the moonlit sky
thinking of you i start to cry i walk alone in this pouring rain feeling so hurt, feeling so much pain i thought of that time when i held u so tight whispering these words evrything will be alright the look on our face made everything okay just one smile u took my heart away day by day im still living in a past a past i once had that never did last everyday im lost with nothing to do but a broke down heart thats always loving you yay hope u like |
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Sep 25 2004, 04:14 PM
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cb=bullshit. Group: Member Posts: 1,783 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,793 |
Some of it doesn't make sense...
you both stare at the moonlit sky thinking of her makes you cry and then the next minute you're alone... well at the beginning you said you were together staring at the moonlit sky, well that's what i inferred from the " we both stare at the moonlit sky" |
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dispn0ygonekrazy a depressing poem Sep 24 2004, 08:36 PM
swe3ttemptasian awWww.. cute poem =]..but depressin..hmm Sep 24 2004, 09:29 PM dispn0ygonekrazy lol i dunno about depressin but when i wrote it to... Sep 24 2004, 09:36 PM swe3ttemptasian lol it sounds depressin to me.. most of my poems a... Sep 24 2004, 09:37 PM dispn0ygonekrazy lol something in common same here i write poems ab... Sep 24 2004, 09:46 PM rainnydaiis you know what we should making a writing family =P... Sep 25 2004, 11:48 AM dispn0ygonekrazy a writing family lol good idea SAM!! props... Sep 25 2004, 01:11 PM MyVermilionPlague That's a nice poem.
Really nice, actually.
Mad... Sep 25 2004, 03:53 PM dispn0ygonekrazy lol yeh that one was a quickie but i still like it Sep 25 2004, 04:20 PM rainnydaiis tahts why its called free write poems =P Sep 25 2004, 04:22 PM dispn0ygonekrazy yh u feel me sam geez lol Sep 25 2004, 04:25 PM lucky_clover that is such a sweet peom!!! so sad...... Oct 5 2004, 05:28 PM fallingstar *singsong*
mike is depreeeeesed! Dec 26 2006, 07:14 PM
wildncrazyath3rt i like it you can feel all of the emotions that u ... Mar 16 2007, 07:02 AM |
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