Lonely Heart, Another poem |
 Sep 16 2004, 03:07 PM
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Another Poem I wrote...
The life of a lonely heart whose love was torn apart Living life with only tears To love one now being a fear the memories of smiling knowing all of it was lying the laughter you thought that will never end the day came when she said lets be friends afraid to open to new people Ignoring them was thought of as simple Never loving another |
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Sep 16 2004, 11:11 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Hmm, Rather well done, Especially considering that the poem rhymes. I never favored rhyming, Since I felt it deprived me from complete freedom.
I like your style and rhythmn, It makes one pause and think after each line. |
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rainnydaiis Lonely Heart Sep 16 2004, 03:07 PM
inquisitive_ Wow! Makes me feel lonely. Its a very good poe... Sep 16 2004, 11:13 PM Heathasm it's a really simply rhyme, i didn't like ... Sep 17 2004, 01:25 PM
lucky_clover nice!!! i smiled when i read that poem... Oct 5 2004, 05:46 PM |
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