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A Heroes Fall, my boyfriend wrote this
fakerleesha
post Aug 16 2004, 11:24 PM
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Hay guys!

I'm here with a poem written by my boyfriend. He REALLY wants your opinions on it so ready set GO!

negative & positive critiques welcome :]

A Heroes Fall - By: Brandon

I watch you fall from the highest tower.
Plummeting down by the hour.
NO fear cause here i am.
I will save you cause I'm superman.

I will be there for you in your darkest hour.
I will help I'll use my power.
Just trust in me knowing that I'll always be there.
I will catch you when you're falling your heart heavy with dispair.

I see you dying while I'm in flight.
You know your tears are my kryptonite.
It hurts me cause you fight battles i cant help you win.

So this is my plight.
Stopped dead by my kryptonite.
I've lost my purpose you wont let me fight.

So now your pain and grief have me bound.
A weight me I ill take ill carry around.
Bet you never thought you'd see me cry.
It hurts me more to hear you screaming WHY.

Nothing i can do but watch you fall.
I feel powerless you showed me i cant save them all.
While you descend i wont look away.
Ill never forget I couldnt save the day.

I can still hear you scream.
My heart so torn and its killing me.
I bet they never thought I'd die.
Killed by anothers cry.
The raging torment held within.
Superman died he couldnt help a friend.

kthxguyss!! BYEE!
 
 
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yeseulx3
post Aug 17 2004, 01:15 PM
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Ah, mon Dieu !
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sounds like a song ^ ^ it's good
 

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fakerleesha   A Heroes Fall   Aug 16 2004, 11:24 PM
strwbrrykiwi23   sounds like a song ^ ^ it's good   Aug 17 2004, 01:15 PM
F1R3B4T   lol realli nice i like it thumbs up to ur boyfrend...   Aug 18 2004, 02:52 AM


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