Poetry. Options

[Devastation]

ok everyone, if you have poetry, any poetry submit it please. i love to read it as well as write it. dont be afraid, any piece of poetry is a work of art. I could learn a few pointers as well as give a few pointers, if you have any opinions about poems give them out, help the poet out if he has a few mistakes you think he made. and please, all of the poems here are copywrited by the people who write them, it really pisses me off to see someone copy and paste a poem from another website. thanx.

<3 andrew.

[black_cloud10]

heh awesome idea andrew ^_^

uhm this one is currently untitled (as are most of my poems) its only gone through one edit, so suggestions are really appreciated. and yeah its about suicide so...


As I lay here and weep - I pray the Lord my soul to keep - See my blood, crimson red - From slit wrists and a bullet to the head - An empty bottle once filled with pills - Who knew that what should heal also kills? - My life flashes on the wall - Every scream, every tear that made me end it all


ceng - nice poem, even though i'm not a huge fan of Blank Verse.
third line "it mends broken hearts" instead, maybe?
last line "I guarantee it’ll mend everything"
those lines kinda stick out because of length

BiGdRaGoN31 - i liked the ending... seems like u were nervous to admit it. that or you were listening to Burn at the time =P lol nice poem