Depression Kills??, My First writing piece...it needs work |
 Jul 3 2004, 02:05 AM
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 S*q*U*e*E*G*i*E  Group: Member Posts: 157 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,243  |
THIS NEEDS ALLLOOOT OF WORK
but i wrote it for a band i know and it will be one of their songs when im done iwth it some of the lines should be edited i know but can you please help me with some suggestions?? thnx lol oops for got to put it in.... look below |
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Jul 7 2004, 01:55 AM
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 i'm susan Group: Official Member Posts: 13,875 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 5,029 |
u did a wonderful job! but were u in a depression mood that time? ur feelings sounded like u loved someone so much but u lost her... so u just wana die and dont wake up, right? sad poem, but nice poem!
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Squeegie Depression Kills?? Jul 3 2004, 02:05 AM
Squeegie Depression Kills
By: Devin Galloway
I'm going... Jul 3 2004, 02:42 PM sweetxsimplicity ooh nice poem. i put a star on the lines that don... Jul 4 2004, 03:36 PM Squeegie thats waht i thought...but i need suggestions Jul 5 2004, 05:04 PM LatinaLady oh i loveit. i feel it. i can conenct with the poe... Jul 7 2004, 02:44 AM LatinaLady oh i loveit. i feel it. i can conenct with the poe... Jul 7 2004, 02:45 AM Squeegie thnx everyone and i did feel everything that anqel... Jul 7 2004, 01:47 PM
thisisarcycledsn QUOTE(sweetxsimplicity @ Jul 4 2004, 3:36 PM)... Jul 7 2004, 03:34 PM |
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