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 Jul 6 2004, 03:29 AM
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The Tear
Born out of sorrow, pain, and despair, A birth like none other, spawned without care. The tear shows no mercy, no remorse, no sympathy, It only clouds your vision, so you're unable to see. The blurs spread your eyeline like rapid fire, To be back to normal, your one desire. But time stands still when the tears are flowing... Your face beat red, your emotions showing. A drop of salty water crashes your world to the ground, All in an instant; no lights, no sound... Just in the back bedroom, sprawled on the bed, Away from the world, hands sheltering your head. The crying fails to cease, and you continue through the night, You cry yourself to sleep, awaking to the light. And then it's back to the bedroom, back to the sorrow, and back to the infamous tear... So you can finish your life, unhappy in tears, with everything unclear. I wish I was a tear, so I could start in your eyes, live on your cheek, and die on your lips... -- Justin David Johnston, 2003. What do you think? |
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Jul 6 2004, 03:31 AM
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Wow, that's so deep..despite that you used too common words to rhyme with, nothing could make this poem better. (Other than you sending me a real copy with your autograph so I could hang it on my wall.) LoL. You're so talented.
 
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CrackedRearView the tear Jul 6 2004, 03:29 AM
eboarder2020 Thats a great poem... Its really deep and has alot... Jul 6 2004, 10:25 AM CrackedRearView No, I don't care. Of course you can use it :-) Jul 6 2004, 04:31 PM angel-roh aww it's sucha sad poem!! i dont know ... Jul 7 2004, 01:39 AM CrackedRearView Justin's in the house Jul 7 2004, 02:33 AM CrackedRearView Born out of spite, sorrow, despair,
A birth like n... Oct 15 2004, 10:01 PM mSz_dOrk_anGeL Beautiful as ever. Oct 15 2004, 10:03 PM MasteRxKiD Nice way to work around that line.
Doesn't see... Oct 15 2004, 11:26 PM Cloud_X Ya kno..Whenever I see a poem made by you, I kno i... Oct 15 2004, 11:53 PM Heathasm QUOTE(Cloud_X @ Oct 15 2004, 11:53 PM)Wheneve... Oct 16 2004, 07:25 AM liquidbluac1d wow.. thats awesome Oct 16 2004, 07:47 AM imadorkabledxd are the last 2 llines part of ur poem? isn't ... Mar 18 2005, 12:27 PM Teesa wow, that's so lovely. I can relate to the ... Mar 18 2005, 06:36 PM CRAZEDindian40 That's freakin awesome, I love it. Mar 18 2005, 09:01 PM M1SSxCHR1SSY I like it. It's really good. But if the quote ... Mar 19 2005, 02:00 AM salcha like Heatherasm said, i thought it was strangely u... Mar 22 2005, 02:35 AM yukichan wow..that was really good...like someone said abov... Mar 23 2005, 06:53 PM
Azarel A bit late, but anyway.
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