so what do you think about the begging of my journal entry., review me cb. Options

[AngryBaby]

okay well i gotta do this entry thing on my opinion and ideals of higher powers for one of my classes. its not supposed to be TOO long

the best collection of entries after the semester is done gets a treat. probably sex.

i just wrote this entry about 45 minutes ago so i wanted to see what cb would think, because i'm not really done but i rushed kinda quick. so yeah. lawl sex

here's my first entry THAT IS NOT DONE, im still doing it as we speak lol. i dont write so good, but just tell me if its not too embarrasing. cuz i really want teh sex.



its not done im continuing off of that so yeah
meh, i probably gotta delete this soon so that when they run it through the machine they dont find this off of this link hah


edit//sorry had to delete it guys, thanks for the input!

[Reidar]

Sentences don't make sense: "Now I explain to the audience that my mind carries that are comprised of many doubters, what exactly I mean."

Semicolons should divide complete clauses.

You insist that you are not questioning whether God exists or not because you do not know. Why would NOT knowing something be reason to not question it?

You make "man" and "his relationship with God" sound like the personal, intimate version of being a believer (i.e. yours) yet that phrasing was used to illustrate organized religion.