The Awakening, Poem |
 Apr 21 2009, 07:47 AM
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 Candy & Cookie Tester  Group: Member Posts: 76 Joined: Apr 2009 Member No: 724,880  |
Open your eyes!
Why can't you open them? The worlds end is so close I'm sure you want to see it! I'm by your side so don't be scared Keeping your eyes closed won't protect you It's so close can't you tell. The signs are everywhere It's time to wake up Open your eyes the days of the reborn world are before you. Ok so I wrote this poem a while back and i've even submitted it on a website, here it is My Poem's |
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Apr 21 2009, 08:58 AM
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 AIDS at RAVES. Group: Official Designer Posts: 2,386 Joined: Dec 2007 Member No: 598,878 |
Im guessing it is a blank verse because you do not have repetition, as far as the message, I think it is too straightforward, you should try to allude to a point, not just state it. But props to you cause I hate writing poetry, I just read it
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Apr 28 2009, 10:20 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 550 Joined: Mar 2007 Member No: 509,557 |
QUOTE(synatribe @ Apr 21 2009, 09:58 AM)  Im guessing it is a blank verse because you do not have repetition, as far as the message, I think it is too straightforward, you should try to allude to a point, not just state it. But props to you cause I hate writing poetry, I just read it I agree completely. |
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Superase The Awakening Apr 21 2009, 07:47 AM
mipadi You the potential for a lot of rich imagery, but y... Apr 23 2009, 10:24 PM
Superase Thanks for the advice everyone! Ok so i've... Apr 27 2009, 08:33 AM |
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